Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The give line graph depicts the trend in number of joinees in majorly 5 activities such as film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical prformances, held at social centre in Melbourne, Australia from the year 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is quite vivid that film club accounts the highest number of participants with a little fluctuation but ended up by remain unchanged, while the amateur dramatics club got sharply declined till 2020 which results to be least among all activities.

Regarding the film club, most number of participants it acquired likewise almost 65 in 2000 and got a surge of 5 participants in 2010 followed by a increase of again 5 members in 2020 which makes it remain unchanged. Subsequently, the martial arts club is also remained nearly constant to 35 members in 2000 and 2020 with slight fluctuations in 2005 and 2010.

Whilst the club called amateur dramatics contributing around 25 participants in 2000, but a suddent decline result it to not more than 5 members at the end which established a nadir in whole trend.

Furthermore, table tennis got popularity from 15 members in 2000 and gradually increased to almost 18 in 2005, 20 in 2010 which is equal to amateur dramatics members in 2010, further climbed to 35 joinees in 2015 and ended up by joining 55 members, nevertheless, lesser than film club members.

Musical performances club reflects the opportunity grabbed within limited period of time, it acquires almost 0 members till 2005, but afterwards, 10 members joined it and number increased to almost 15 in 2015, while acheived 17 memers in 2020 which is just half the martial arts contestants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all five activities and identify the main patterns: film club remains the largest, amateur dramatics declines to the lowest level, and table tennis rises strongly. Several figures are close to the chart, including table tennis reaching about 55 and musical performances starting at zero. However, the overview says film club “ended up by remain unchanged,” although it rises slightly overall, from about 64 to 66. The account of its changes is also inaccurate: it falls to around 60 in 2010 before recovering, rather than gaining five participants at each stated stage. Some comparisons are useful, such as table tennis matching amateur dramatics in 2010, but other details are less clearly reported. A more precise overview and accurate description of key stages would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the activities. The sequence from film club and martial arts to amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances makes the information easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “Whilst” to connect points. At times, however, these links feel mechanical or do not express the relationship accurately; “nevertheless” before the final table-tennis comparison is not a natural contrast. The long table-tennis sentence combines several years and comparisons, making the progression harder to track. Use shorter sentences for the main changes and group related trends more consistently to make cohesion smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of vocabulary related to trends, including “fluctuation,” “decline,” “climbed,” and “nadir,” and the activity names are generally clear. However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise for describing a graph: “joinees,” “got a surge,” “grabbed,” and “contestants” do not fit this context well. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “prformances,” “suddent,” “acheived,” and “memers.” Phrases such as “accounts the highest number” and “got popularity” show difficulty with collocation. Prefer standard, precise reporting language and check spelling; this will make your descriptions more fluent and reduce the effort required to interpret them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while,” “which,” and “but,” and your meaning is generally recoverable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “the amateur dramatics club got sharply declined” has an incorrect verb pattern, while “it is also remained” combines incompatible forms. “Film club accounts the highest number” is missing a grammatical element, and “a increase” has an article error. Some long sentences, particularly the table-tennis description, also make relationships between clauses difficult to follow. Practise accurate patterns such as “the number of participants rose/fell” and review articles and tense consistency while retaining your attempts at complex sentences.

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