Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The Line graph illustrate that the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia activity Film club, martial arts and amateur dramatics and table tennis and last activity Musical performances for the period [redacted phone].

Over all, it is clear that Film club and Martial arts are high number of participants activity in 2000 -2020 and the amateur dramatics and musical performances has low number of participants by activity [redacted phone] and the table tennis has remind stable.

In the first activity film club in 2000 his number of activity 60 above number and in 2020 his activity has increased and reached 70 number of participants . the second activity is martial arts in 2000 his number of participants activity nearly 40 number activity and in 2020 his number activity has remind stable. the third activity is Amateur dramatics in 2000 his number of participants nearly 30 number and in 2020 his number of activity has very low nearly 10 number.

The fourth activity is table tennis in 2000 his number activity nearly 20 number of activity and in 2020 his number activity is has very rose up nearly 60 number of activity and the last activity is musical performances in 2000 his number activity 0 number and in 2020 his number activity rose up nearly 20 number of participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all five activities and identify several important overall patterns: film club remains among the most popular, amateur dramatics declines, and table tennis rises sharply. The endpoint comparisons are generally close to the chart, including musical performances starting at zero and reaching about 20. However, the overview contains a major misreading: table tennis does not remain stable; it climbs from about 16 to 54, becoming the second-largest activity by 2020. The description also focuses mainly on 2000 and 2020, leaving the fluctuations in film club and martial arts, and the timing of table tennis’s growth, under-developed. A more accurate overview and a few key intermediate figures would make the main features clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a body that moves through the activities. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the organisation is largely a repeated list, with each activity introduced in turn rather than grouped to highlight meaningful comparisons or trends. The overview’s claim that table tennis is stable also conflicts with its later description of a sharp rise, weakening the progression of ideas. Linking phrases such as “the second activity” and “the last activity” are repetitive and do little to show relationships between series. Grouping the declining and rising activities, and using clearer comparisons, would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “increased,” “stable,” and “rose up,” so the topic is usually understandable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word combinations are unnatural or unclear, such as “his number of activity,” “very rose up,” and “high number of participants activity.” Repeating “activity” and “number” also makes the account less precise. Use standard trend language and accurate nouns—for example, describe participant numbers as rising, falling, remaining stable, or reaching a figure. Take care with word forms and spelling as well, including “Over all,” which should be “Overall.” More varied, natural collocations would make the report easier to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally follow the intended comparisons. However, grammatical control is weak in many sentences. The opening has subject–verb disagreement (“The Line graph illustrate”), while “the amateur dramatics and musical performances has” also has an agreement error. Pronouns are repeatedly used incorrectly for activities and figures (“his number”), and several clauses lack the articles or grammatical structure needed for natural sentences, as in “in 2000 his number of activity 60 above number.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly in the long overview and body sentences. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, article use, and complete sentence patterns before adding more complex structures.

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