Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph illustrates trend of participants varying across different sports and art activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall it can be seen that, Film club registered the highest number of participants from 2000 to 2020. Participants in the musical performances and table tennis grew significantly over the years while categories of amateur dramatics and martial saw a volatile trend in the number of participants.

Film club accounted for the highest number of participants in 2000, recording slightly above 60, the category saw a marginal decline till 2010, followed by a gradual increase till 2020. Table tennis activity had 16 number of participants at the start of 2000, the category gained popularity after 2010 when it saw a drastic uptick in the number of participants to stand at around 50 participants in 2020.

While category of amateur dramatics had around 25 participants which consistently decreased over the years to close at almost 5 participants in the year 2020, musical performance category which had zero participants in 2000 remained nill till 2005 before it saw a drastic growth in the number of participants to stand at around 15 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern that the film club remained the most popular activity, and you report the contrasting rise in table tennis and decline in amateur dramatics. Several figures and trends are also accurately described, including film club’s slight dip before recovery and musical performances starting at zero. However, the overview says martial arts was volatile, although its figures fluctuate only modestly around the mid-30s; this is less significant than the sharp table-tennis increase. The account also omits useful comparisons, such as table tennis overtaking amateur dramatics and approaching the film club by 2020. More precise coverage of martial arts and clearer comparisons would make the summary more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the main trends. Information is generally grouped sensibly, with film club and table tennis discussed together before the declining and newly emerging activities. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “followed by,” and “While” help show relationships between ideas. However, the final paragraph combines two contrasting series in a long sentence, making the comparison harder to follow, and the overview’s reference to martial arts as volatile does not prepare the reader for the limited discussion of that activity. Use shorter, more balanced sentences and give each important trend a clear place in the overview and detail paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of trend vocabulary, including “marginal decline,” “gradual increase,” “drastic uptick,” and “consistently decreased.” These choices make the main movements understandable and show some flexibility beyond basic terms such as “rise” and “fall.” Some collocations and expressions are less natural or precise, however: “had 16 number of participants,” “gained popularity,” and “saw a drastic growth” could be expressed more idiomatically for chart description. “Volatile trend” also overstates the small fluctuations in martial arts. Aim for accurate, restrained language that describes the data rather than implying causes or stronger changes than the graph shows.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the contrast structure beginning “While category of amateur dramatics…” and the sequence “followed by a gradual increase.” Most meanings remain clear, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, the opening needs an article (“illustrates the trend”), and “Film club” should not be separated from the rest of its sentence by a comma after “Overall it can be seen that.” The phrase “had 16 number of participants” has an inaccurate noun construction, while “category … which had zero participants” would benefit from clearer sentence boundaries. Check articles, punctuation, and clause structure, and vary sentence lengths to improve control.

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