Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrate information about one social centre that is present in Melbourne, Australia in which number of participants for different activities like film club, table tenis, martial arts etc, between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the activity in which people participant most was film club throughout two decades. However, the activity in particpation of people decline dramatically was amateur dramatics. In addition, the interset in table tennis after 2010, participant were jumped massively. Moreover, the noticeable activity was musical performances that were started in 2002 rather than 2000 and the average activity that also stable through out years was martial arts.

In detail, the most stable participation only happen in two activities includes film club and martial arts in which at start of 2000, Number of participant were 65 and 35 respectively and also after two decades that were remain almost same with 65 and 35. Moreover, if talk about most dramtically change of participant in activities in which includes table tennis and amateur dramatic. Table tennis was start from 15 participants and in 2010, increase to 20 while after that participant inclined massively to end at almost 55 participants. However, amateur dramatics start with 25 participants in 2000, and in 2005 increase to 29 and after that declined dramatically. Moreover, the interseting activity musical performances was started in 2005 with zero participant and after two decades progress slightly to 15 participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main patterns: film club remains the most popular activity, amateur dramatics declines substantially, and table tennis rises sharply after 2010. The overview also notes the relative stability of martial arts, and the body includes relevant approximate figures to support these points. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: musical performances first register participants in 2010, not 2002 or 2005, and table tennis rises from about 20 in 2010 to 54 in 2020 rather than simply ending at 55. The claim that film club and martial arts remain at the same figures also overlooks their small fluctuations. To strengthen the response, report the key stages more precisely and make the overview’s comparisons clearer, especially the contrast between table tennis’s growth and amateur dramatics’ decline.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to supporting details. This helps the reader follow the main trends, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Moreover” signal relationships between points. At times, though, these connectors are repeated or do not create a clear logical link; several sentences begin with “Moreover,” and phrases such as “if talk about most dramatically change” interrupt the progression. Some references are also vague, including “that were remain almost same,” where the activities and figures are not expressed clearly. Grouping the rising and falling activities into more direct comparisons, and using fewer but more precise transitions, would make the organisation smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “declined dramatically,” “stable,” and “increased,” so the reader can understand the broad trends. However, the range and control are limited by repeated general wording and several inaccurate collocations or forms, such as “people participant,” “participant were jumped,” and “the noticeable activity.” Spelling errors, including “interset,” “particpation,” and “dramtically,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise trend language and natural combinations, for example, “the number of participants rose sharply” or “attendance remained relatively stable.” Varying verbs such as “rose,” “fell,” “fluctuated,” and “reached” would help describe the data more clearly without relying repeatedly on “activity” and “participant.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including comparisons across years, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction occur in several places. For example, “The line graph illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “participant were jumped massively” has an incorrect verb construction. The sentence beginning “Moreover, if talk about…” is also incomplete in form, and “that were remain almost same” combines incompatible verb forms. These issues sometimes make relationships between figures harder to follow. Practise building accurate comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Table tennis participation rose from 20 in 2010 to about 54 in 2020,” and check agreement and tense throughout.

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