Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph provides detail of number of people that take part in five activities at a social centre in the city Melbourne of Austerlia between [redacted phone].

Overall, the highest number of participants were in film club and the lowest people were interseted amateur dramaticas by the end of 2020. Their was sharp rise in participants of table tennis and the number of participants in amateur had decresed suddenly.

In Film club and and material arts many people were initally interseted, 65 and 45 respectivey in number and did not changed over 20 years but at 2010 in film club participants decrese slightly at the same participants increase in material arts.The applicants in table tannis were at lowest in 2000 except musical performnace but after 10 years it increses dramatically over 50 which was second highest than film club after 2020.The interst of people in amateur dramatics was on average in 2000 although at the end of 2020 of it had less than 5 participants left. The musical performance no-one was interested at early, after 2005 people start to particiate in it and increase steadly to 15 after 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall patterns: film club remains the most popular activity, table tennis rises strongly, and amateur dramatics declines to the lowest level. These are relevant features and support a clear overview. However, several details are inaccurate or unclear. Martial arts is reported as starting at 45, although the chart shows about 36, and table tennis reaches over 50 only by 2020, not after 2010. The claim that film club and martial arts “did not changed” also overlooks their fluctuations. Musical performances begin in 2000, rather than after 2005, and reach about 18 in 2020. More precise comparisons and accurate reporting of the stages would make the summary more complete and better supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and a paragraph describing individual activities. This helps the reader identify the main trends. However, the final paragraph combines several series in a long, crowded sequence, so comparisons are difficult to follow. Linking phrases such as “although,” “after 10 years” and “at the same time” are sometimes used in ways that do not clearly show the relationship between the data. For example, the table-tennis and musical-performance trends are joined to the discussion of film club and martial arts. Organise the details into clearer groups—perhaps stable or fluctuating activities, then rising and falling ones—and use more precise references to years and series.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “participants,” “sharp rise,” “decreased” and “steadily,” and you attempt to describe change rather than simply list figures. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning harder to understand. Phrases such as “the lowest people were interested,” “the applicants in table tennis” and “the interest of people … was on average” do not express the intended data clearly. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “Austerlia,” “interseted” and “dramaticas.” Use standard chart language such as “participation,” “the number of participants,” “rose sharply” and “fell to,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses linked with “although” and “after,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms, agreement and sentence construction occur throughout and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “Their was sharp rise,” “did not changed,” and “the number … decrease slightly”; these need forms such as “There was a sharp rise,” “did not change” and “the number decreased slightly.” Some sentences also lack clear grammatical structure, particularly the long sentence beginning “In Film club and and material arts.” Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related information with accurate clauses and punctuation.

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