Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The illustration shows that number of participant, by activity between 2000 and 2020 on a social centre in Melbourne and Australia. Overall, all of the five activities table tennis participation dramatically increased . In contrast, amateur dramatics activity participation fell to its lowest numbers.But the film club and martial arts were remain almost stable with minor difference in its participation.

It is quite evident from the given line graph which showed relationship between number of participant and year. Film club was the only one which had more participants and they remain constant between 2000 and 2010, after that start increasing and reached 65 in 2020. Musical performance was such type of activity which start from 2005, and they start rose and reach at 10 by 2010 and 15 by 2020.

Furthermore, table tenis was the activity which showed dramatically increased and reached at 50 from 15 participants with a decade. In contrast, amateur dramatics showed significantly decreased in its numbers from 28% in 2005 and 5% in 2020. All of them martial arts was those which remain overall stable with minor increas in its numbers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall patterns: table-tennis participation rises sharply, amateur dramatics declines, and film club and martial arts remain broadly stable. You also include several relevant figures, such as film club reaching about 65 and table tennis rising from roughly 15 to 50. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: film-club numbers dip slightly before rising, rather than remaining constant from 2000 to 2010; musical performances begin in 2010, not 2005; and the graph reports participant numbers, not percentages. The overview is relevant, but the account of musical performances and the exact changes in some series are less fully and accurately developed. Check each trend and unit against the graph before writing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an overview followed by paragraphs describing the activities, and contrast markers such as “In contrast” help signal comparisons. The main trends can generally be followed. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is uneven: the second paragraph moves from film club to musical performances, while the final paragraph returns to table tennis, amateur dramatics and martial arts without a clear grouping principle. Some linking phrases are awkward or repetitive, including “Furthermore” and “In contrast,” and references such as “they” and “All of them martial arts” are not always clear. Grouping the rising, falling and stable series more deliberately, and using clearer references, would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “participation,” “dramatically increased,” “significantly decreased” and “stable,” so the reader can understand the broad trends. There is also some attempt to vary descriptions of change. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “number of participant,” “start rose,” “reached at,” and “minor difference in its participation.” “Table tenis” and “increas” also show spelling errors, while “28%” and “5%” use the wrong unit for participant counts. Aim for precise, natural chart language—for example, “the number of participants,” “rose to,” and “a slight fluctuation”—and check spelling and units carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast structure in “In contrast, amateur dramatics activity participation fell…” and a relative clause in “which showed relationship between number of participant and year.” However, some errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement and articles make parts of the response awkward. Examples include “Film club was the only one which had more participants and they remain constant,” where the tense and pronoun agreement are unclear, and “All of them martial arts was those,” which is difficult to parse. Missing articles in “shows that number” and inconsistent past-tense forms such as “start increasing” also reduce accuracy. Use consistent past tense for the period and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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