Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the information on the number of participants for different activities like film club, martial arts, amateure dramatics, table tennis, musical performance at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is clear that film club had the highest figure and fluctuate with the time, whereas musical performance had the lowest. Table tennis also show continuious growth, while amateure dramatics declined.

In 2000, film club had the approximately the highest number of participants, its almost 65. But with the passage of time it show some fluctuations. It had 60 number of participants in 2010, after that it rose gradually to 67 in 2020. Martial arts had show some fluctuations with the time. It had 37 number of participants at the starting and then it decline to 33 in 2005. After that, it increased to 38 in 2010 and at the end it declined to 36 in 2020.

Amaeure dramatics had 28 numer of participants in 2000, while table tennis had 18 number of participants. After that both show some growth in 2005 and then amateur dramatics declined sharply from 29 in 2005 to 5 in 2020. Whereas table tennis climed sharply from 20 number of participants in 2010 to 57 in 2020. In contrast, in starting musical performance had no participants. After 2005 it increased and had 15 participants in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You provide a clear overview of the main patterns: film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises substantially, and amateur dramatics declines. These are accurate and relevant features, and the response covers all five activities. Several figures are also reported reasonably closely, such as film club at about 60 in 2010 and martial arts at 38. To make the account more complete, include the key stages in table tennis’s rise (from about 16 in 2000 to 54 in 2020) and musical performances’ start around 2010, rather than saying only “After 2005 it increased.” The overview also calls musical performances the lowest throughout, although it reaches about 18 by 2020, above amateur dramatics. The broad coverage is strong, but these details and comparisons need greater precision.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the figures. The grouping of film club and martial arts, followed by the other activities, gives the reader a workable route through the data. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “After that,” and “In contrast” help signal relationships. However, “After that” is repeated often and sometimes makes the sequence feel mechanical. The final paragraph also moves between amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances without clearly separating their trends, and “both show some growth” is not fully clear about which years are being compared. Use more precise time references and organise each paragraph around a clear comparison to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to describe the graph, including “fluctuations,” “declined sharply,” “rose gradually,” and “climbed sharply.” These choices communicate the main movements, and the range is appropriate for a data summary. However, several spelling and word-form errors are noticeable, including “amateure,” “continuious,” “numer,” and “climed.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “had 60 number of participants” and “in starting.” Repetition of “show” and “increased” limits flexibility. Aim for accurate collocations such as “stood at,” “the number of participants,” and “at the beginning,” and check spelling carefully. More precise trend vocabulary would help distinguish a stable pattern from a rise or fluctuation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including contrasts with “whereas” and “while,” and the overall meaning is generally understandable. However, errors in verb forms and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “film club … fluctuate” should use a past-tense verb, and “Martial arts had show” needs a correct past participle or a simpler construction. There are also problems with articles and sentence patterns in “had the approximately the highest number” and “It had 60 number of participants.” These errors sometimes make the data descriptions awkward, even when the intended meaning can be inferred. Practise consistent past-tense reporting and build accurate patterns such as “the figure was approximately 65” and “participation fell to 33.”

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