Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph provides information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the graph explains the number of participants in five different activities which were film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performance. The participants in both activities rise, fall and vice versa.

The number of participants in film club decrease from 64 in 2000 to 63 in 2005. It droped to 60 in 2010. After a fall: recovery to 65 happened in 2015. It reached its highest point to 66 in 2020. Martial acts participants slump from 37 in 2000 to 32 in 2005. A rise to 39 occur in 2010 which collapse to 35 in 2015. At the end it achieve 36 in 2020. Amateur dramatics climb from 26 in 2000 to 28 in 2005. In 2010, a collapse to 20 which drop to to 13 in 2015. At the end it reached to 5 in 2020.

In Table tennis, paricipants gradually grow from 15 in 2000 to 20 in 2005. Which remains the same in 2010. By 2015, it sudden go up to 35 in 2015 and hit a trough of 55 in 2020. Muscial performances has no participants in till 2005. A growth from 0 to 10 occur in 2010 which streadily go to 16 in 2015. Following that it reached to its peak of 19 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover all five activities and report many of their main movements, including the film club’s broadly stable level, the decline in amateur dramatics, and the strong growth in table tennis. Most figures are close to the chart, but there are some inaccuracies: table tennis reaches about 54 in 2020, not a “trough” of 55 (it is a peak), and musical performances end at about 18 rather than 19. The overview is too vague: “both activities rise, fall and vice versa” does not identify the key contrasts. State clearly that film club remains the most popular, table tennis rises sharply, and amateur dramatics falls substantially. This would make the summary more selective and the main features clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure, with an introduction, an attempted overview, and paragraphs describing the activities. Grouping the figures by activity makes the information easy to locate. However, progression is weakened by the vague overview and by several awkward links between clauses, such as “In 2010, a collapse to 20 which drop to to 13” and “By 2015, it sudden go up to 35 in 2015.” Some transitions are also repetitive, particularly “At the end” and “In 2010.” Use clearer sentence boundaries and link related trends more deliberately—for example, contrast the declining amateur dramatics figures with table tennis’s rise. This would make the account flow more logically.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of trend vocabulary, including “decrease,” “recovery,” “slump,” “climb,” and “steadily,” and the activity names are generally clear. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a line graph. “Collapse” and “slump” overstate relatively modest changes, while “hit a trough” is incorrect for table tennis’s highest value. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “droped,” “paricipants,” and “Muscial,” and some imprecise phrasing such as “musical performance” when referring to the activity category. Choose neutral, precise verbs such as “fell,” “rose,” and “reached a peak,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a mixture of short statements and longer sentences, but control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently enough to make some passages difficult to follow. Examples include “The number of participants … decrease,” “It droped,” and “A rise to 39 occur,” where verb forms do not agree with the subject or tense. Several clauses are incomplete or joined incorrectly: “In 2010, a collapse to 20 which drop to to 13” and “By 2015, it sudden go up to 35 in 2015.” Articles, prepositions, and sentence punctuation also need attention, as in “reached to its peak.” Build accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses, keeping past-tense verbs consistent throughout.

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