Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph tracks shows the information of participants for different activities at one social centre in melbourne.

australia between 2000 to 2020

overall,Table tenis has 15 pericipants in 2000 and we see 5 participants increase in 2005 and 2010 .on other hand in 2015 moreover in 2020 has highly rise respectly at 40 to 50. In contrast ,in 2000 to 2005 the participants of armateur dramatic has 0 participants while, the time period of 2010 number of participant was minor increase 12 participants wheras in 2015 and 2010 went up at 15 to 20 participanted.likewise,in 2000 the participant of martial arts has 35 person but in2005 we saw deline 10 person total 30 participant in 2005. on other hand in 2010 we saw minor increase and then we saw increase inboth year 2015 and 2010.

finally, the flim club was 65 participant in 2000 then we saw minor drop in 2005 and 2010. on other hand there was rised in 2015 and 2020

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart as covering several activities over time and mention some broad movements, including the film club’s slight dip followed by a rise and table tennis’s later increase. However, the account contains major inaccuracies that make the trends difficult to follow: table tennis starts at about 16, not 15, and rises to about 54, rather than 40–50; amateur dramatics declines from about 26 to 6, not from zero or upward to 15–20. The martial-arts figures and years are also confused. There is no clear, accurate overview of the main features or comparison of the activities. Select the most important trends, report them accurately, and distinguish the series clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response by activity, using signals such as “overall,” “in contrast,” and “finally.” This gives the reader some indication of how you intend to move through the chart. However, the opening overview is not clearly separated from the details, and several sentences combine multiple years and trends without a clear sequence. For example, the amateur-dramatics sentence moves between 2000, 2005, 2010, and later years in a way that is hard to interpret. Connectors such as “on other hand” and “moreover” are sometimes used inaccurately or mechanically. Use clear paragraphs and present each activity’s figures in chronological order, with linking phrases that show the actual relationship between trends.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “increase,” “drop,” and “rise,” and you attempt to describe changes rather than simply list figures. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “highly rise,” “minor increase,” and “went up at.” There are also frequent spelling errors in key terms, including “pericipants,” “armateur dramatic,” “flim,” and “deline,” which reduce precision. Aim to use a small set of accurate trend expressions consistently, such as “rose sharply,” “declined steadily,” and “remained relatively stable.” Check spelling and use the correct activity names so the reader can identify each series easily.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences and use time references, but sentence structures are often incomplete or joined in ways that obscure the relationships between ideas. For instance, “on other hand in 2010 we saw minor increase and then we saw increase inboth year 2015 and 2010” lacks clear sentence boundaries and does not express the sequence accurately. Articles, plurals, and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “the participant … has 35 person” and “there was rised.” Capitalisation and punctuation are unreliable, with several sentences beginning in lowercase and commas or full stops missing. Practise writing short, complete sentences with a consistent past tense, then combine them using accurate clauses and punctuation.

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