Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the numbers of individuals participated in several several activities namely flim, martial arts, amateur, table tennis and music in Malbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club was highest participated activity of all the time, while all other activities fluctuated over the time period. After 2010, the amateur and the table tennis seemed to follows an opposite trend, while music ratio sharply raised after 2005.
In 2000, film club started from around 64% and decreased steadily to 60% till 2010, but rose again gradually in the following years, closed at 65% approximately by the end of 2020. In contrast martial arts followed upward and downward trend with the gap of 5 years througout the timeframe, decreased from around 37% to 32% in 2005, and increased from around 35% to 37% in 2020.
The amateur and the table tennis gradually rose to 27% and 18% in 2005, respectively, while music participation remained zero. Untill 2010, table tennis percentage stay unchanged, while the amateur sharply decreased to 18% in 2010. In constrast, the music propotion rapidly increased to 10% in 2010. In the follwing years, music participation steadily increased and rose to 18%, whereas the amateur and the table tennis rapidly decreased and increased, respectively, to 5% and 54% by the end of 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview of the main patterns: film club remains the most popular activity, amateur dramatics declines, and table tennis rises strongly, especially after 2010. It also reports several relevant figures, including film club’s fall to about 60 before recovering and table tennis reaching 54 by 2020. These choices address the task well and support the summary. However, some details are inaccurate: the amateur dramatics figure in 2010 is about 20, not 18, and martial arts ends at about 36 rather than 37. The overview also says all other activities fluctuated, although musical performances rose steadily after 2005. More precise comparisons and a distinction between steady trends and fluctuations would strengthen an otherwise clear account.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response is organised into an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and the information generally progresses from the overall picture to specific figures. Comparisons such as “In contrast” and “whereas” help connect the series, while the final paragraph groups the less popular activities effectively. This gives the report a coherent overall arrangement. However, some linking is mechanical or imprecise: “In the following years” is repeated in effect, and “the amateur and the table tennis” makes the reference awkward. The overview’s claim that all other activities fluctuated also weakens the logical relationship between the summary and the steady rise in musical performances. Clearer referencing and more exact transitions between time periods would make cohesion more flexible.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The response uses a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “decreased steadily,” “opposite trend,” “remained zero” and “rapidly increased.” These expressions help describe change and comparison, and the meaning is generally understandable. However, noticeable word-choice, collocation and spelling problems limit precision. “Numbers of individuals participated” is not a natural construction, “highest participated activity” is awkward, and “music ratio” does not accurately describe participant numbers. There are also misspellings such as “Malbourne,” “througout” and “Untill,” alongside repeated use of “increased” and “decreased.” Use standard chart language such as “number of participants,” “most popular activity” and “participation,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “while,” “whereas” and “although”-type contrasts, and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, errors occur frequently in sentence construction and verb forms. For example, “individuals participated” needs a grammatical construction such as “individuals participating,” while “the amateur and the table tennis seemed to follows” has faulty agreement and verb form. “Table tennis percentage stay unchanged” also needs a past-tense verb, and “film club started from around 64%” uses an awkward grammatical pattern. Articles and sentence boundaries are not consistently controlled either. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and subject–verb agreement, then proofread each sentence for a complete, correctly formed clause.
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