Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The illustrated chart is a line graph which provides data of participants for various activities at many centers in Melbourne, Australia in the year between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, the chart gives the detail information of number of participants, by activities [redacted phone]. On which the number of participants in film club is in the top of the graph than musicial performances is just started in after a complete year. BUt as we look the table tennis is quite interesting in the begining it was in th forth place and than it booms to the second place. There other thing as well they are doing well like Amateur dramatics and martial arts.

Firstly, in film club the number participents are constant throughout the whole year it stayed in the top of the graph as the highest number. The martial arts is in the second place form 2000 to 2015, but after the 2025 Table tennis comes in the secon place. For Amateur dramatics, in the starting it is in the third place with more 25 participants but the downfall is begin in 2010 it goes down year by year.

Lastly, table tennis is in the forth place with nearly 20 participants but becasue of the interest of people in 2010 it boomed up in second place with just above 50. On more interesting things it was equal with amateure dramatics in 2010 and in 2015 with martial arts. Talking about musicial performances it going good in the begining but it gradually inceasing from 2005.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important patterns, including film club remaining the largest activity, table tennis rising, and amateur dramatics declining. However, the report only partially covers the data and contains significant inaccuracies: film-club participation was not constant, but dipped before rising; musical performances began in 2000, not after a complete year, and increased from 2010; and table tennis did not reach second place after 2025, as the graph ends in 2020. The overview also says martial arts and amateur dramatics were “doing well,” although the latter fell sharply. To make the account more complete and reliable, give a clear overview of the main contrasting trends and check each comparison against the years shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs, and sequencing words such as “Firstly” and “Lastly” help signal sections. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the overview repeats details later, and the body paragraphs move between activities and comparisons without a stable organising principle. Some links are difficult to follow, as in “On more interesting things it was equal with amateur dramatics in 2010 and in 2015 with martial arts,” where the reference of “it” is unclear. Grouping the activities by their trends—for example, rising, falling, and relatively stable—would create a clearer progression. Use linking phrases to show precise comparisons rather than relying mainly on basic sequencing words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “participants,” “downfall,” “gradually increasing,” and “boomed,” so the reader can identify the general trends you intend to describe. However, the range is limited and several choices are informal or imprecise for an academic report: “booms,” “doing well,” and “interesting” do not describe the data precisely. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “musicial,” “begining,” “becasue,” and “amateure,” which reduce clarity and control. Aim for accurate trend language and collocations, such as “rose sharply,” “declined steadily,” and “remained relatively stable.” Check spelling carefully, especially for repeated chart labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make parts of the report difficult to interpret. For example, “the number participents are constant” has problems with the noun phrase and subject–verb agreement, while “it gradually inceasing from 2005” lacks a correctly formed verb. Several sentences are fragments or have unclear structure, including “On which the number of participants…” and “There other thing as well they are doing well…”. Tense and article use also need attention. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use past-tense forms consistently when describing the historical figures.

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