Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph chart gives information on the numbers of perticipants for five different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for 20 years of period.

The majority of the perticipants from 2000 to 2020 choose to do activities in the film club, and this was the highest joining activities over the period. However, musical performance starts with the lowest numbers of perticipants in 2005 and took slightly rise at end of the period.

Befor 2010 the table tennis perticipants was around 20, after that a dramatic increase happend in table tennis perticipants from 20 to just under 55. Martial arts perticipants starts with 36 in 2000 and complete with just 2 numbers. Moreover, ameture dramatics perticipants starts with the number of 25 in 2000 and it faced dramatic dicreased over the period.

The number of perticipant for film club was always highest over the period from 2000 to 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the main high and low series and note the sharp rise in table tennis and decline in amateur dramatics, so the response is relevant to the graph. However, the overview is incomplete and some details are inaccurate: martial arts ended at about 36 participants, not “just 2,” and musical performances began at zero in 2000, not 2005. The film club remained highest, but its figures changed only slightly, while table tennis became the second-largest activity by 2020; this comparison is missing. The response also contains 140 words, below the required 150, with 10 words copied from the prompt excluded. Include a fuller overview and accurate key comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction to general observations and then selected activity trends. Connectors such as “However,” “after that,” and “Moreover” show an attempt to link ideas. Nevertheless, progression is limited: the final sentence repeats the claim that the film club was highest, already made in the second paragraph, rather than adding a new comparison. The discussion also jumps between activities without a clear grouping, and “Befor 2010” does not clearly organise the table-tennis figures that follow. Group the main trends—for example, stable/high figures, rising activities, and declining activities—and use references and linking phrases precisely to make the sequence easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “dramatic increase,” “lowest numbers,” and “over the period,” which helps communicate broad trends. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems reduce precision: “graph chart” is redundant, “joining activities” is unnatural, and “took slightly rise” does not express the increase clearly. Repeated misspellings such as “perticipants,” “happend,” “ameture,” and “dicreased” are noticeable. Use standard trend language such as “the number of participants,” “rose slightly,” and “declined steadily,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would also help distinguish a small fluctuation from a dramatic change.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You produce several understandable simple sentences and attempt longer structures, for example, “However, musical performance starts with the lowest numbers … and took slightly rise.” However, the range is limited, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make some statements awkward or unclear. In “Martial arts participants starts … and complete,” the verbs do not agree with the plural subject and the tense is inconsistent; “the table tennis participants was” has the same agreement problem. The opening phrase “for 20 years of period” also has an inaccurate grammatical pattern. Practise describing past data consistently in the past tense, and check subject–verb agreement and article use when editing.

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