Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given chart displays the amount of participants for five different activities, which are film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances at a single social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the span of two decades from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it can be seen that the number of participants in film club, table tennis and musical performances showed an increasing trend, while amateur dramatics experienced a significant decrease and martial arts remained the same as it was before.

In the beginning, in 2000 the number of participants in amateur dramatics started at around 27 and reached to a peak of 29 in 2005.However, it fell significantly approximately 7 in 2020. On the other there were no participants in musical performance in 2000 and 2005,it experienced a considerable increase, reaching almost 19 participant by the year 2020.

Meanwhile, the number of participants in table tennis started at around 17 and plateaued at nearly at 20 in 2005 to 2010. Nevertheless from 2010 it had a dramatic increase registering 55 participants at the end of 2020. Amount of participants from film club and martial arts club faced some fluctuations over the period while film club had the highest number of participants around 67 in 2020 before starting at approximately 64 in 2000. The martial arts started at around 36 participants, reached to a peak of nearly 39 in 2010 where in 2020 it ended with same number when it started in 2000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall patterns and support them with relevant figures: film-club participation remains highest, table tennis rises sharply, musical performances grow from zero, and amateur dramatics declines. Most reported values are close to the chart. The overview is useful, but saying martial arts “remained the same” is too broad: it fluctuates between roughly 32 and 38 before ending near its starting level. The body also gives more detail for some series than others, and the film-club and martial-arts comparison could be clearer. This meets the task well and shows some selection of key features; to make the account more complete and precise, distinguish stable end-to-end totals from changes during the period and compare the series more explicitly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the data. The sequence from amateur dramatics and musical performances to table tennis and the remaining activities is understandable, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Meanwhile,” and “Nevertheless” help signal relationships. However, some transitions feel mechanical or do not express the relationship precisely; for example, “On the other” is incomplete, and “Nevertheless” does not clearly contrast the table-tennis figures that follow. Several details are crowded into the final paragraph, while the first body paragraph combines two separate trends. Grouping rising activities together and declining or fluctuating ones together would create smoother progression and make comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “significant decrease,” “considerable increase,” “plateaued,” and “fluctuations.” These choices help communicate the main movements, and the meaning is generally clear. Some word choices and collocations are less natural or imprecise, however: “amount of participants” is better expressed as “number of participants,” and “reached to a peak” is not idiomatic. “Faced some fluctuations” is also awkward, while “dramatic increase” could be replaced with a more measured description suited to formal data reporting. Aim for precise, conventional chart language and check singular/plural forms in phrases such as “19 participant.” This would make the vocabulary more controlled and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “while” and “where,” and most of the trends remain understandable. Some grammatical and punctuation errors persist. For example, “reached to a peak” has an incorrect verb pattern, and “it fell significantly approximately 7” is missing a clear preposition and noun phrase. There are also sentence-boundary and spacing problems, such as “2005.However” and “2005,it,” as well as awkward construction in “where in 2020 it ended.” Review verb patterns, articles and prepositions, and use punctuation to separate clauses cleanly. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen the control shown in the response.

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