Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the proportion of participants for varying activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the highest number of involvement of people is on film club. Both film club and martial arts segment seems to have remained constant over the period of years with some minor fluctuations, the highest sugre has been on the participants of table tennis. Meanwhile, the largest proportion of declination on the participants of amateur dramatics is noted. Consequently, musical performance seem to evolve from 2005 with constant increase till the end of period.

Film club remains the most popular choice among the individuals with around at 60 to 63 participants over the period of years. Martial arts also seems to have maintained the participants number on average of 30 to 35 from year 2000 to 2020. the most noticebale changes had been on the two groups which is amateur dramatics and table tennis , while amateur dramatics seem to have a slight increase from 18 number of participants to 20 in year 2005 it dramtically declined over the couse of year and became among the least choice for the individuals at 8 participants.Whereas, people participating in table tennis seem to have slight increase from base year of 18 participants to 20 in 2005, remained constant up until 2010 and skyrocketed reaching around 52 participants.

Consequently, Musical performances seems to attract the individuals from year 2005 the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main patterns: film club remains the most popular activity, table tennis rises markedly, amateur dramatics declines, and musical performances grow from zero. These are relevant features and give the response a clear overview. Several figures, however, are inaccurate: film club is about 60–66, rather than 60–63; amateur dramatics starts at about 26, not 18, and ends near 6, not 8; table tennis begins at about 16, not 18. The final sentence about musical performances is unfinished, so this trend is not fully reported, and the overview’s claim that martial arts remained constant could be more precise about its fluctuations. More accurate figures and a complete account of all series would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and a paragraph describing several activities. This helps the reader follow the broad comparisons. However, progression is weakened by repetitive linking and unclear connections: “Consequently” is used to introduce musical performances even though no cause-and-effect relationship is shown, and it appears again at the start of the unfinished final sentence. The long third paragraph combines several series and comparisons, making the information harder to track. The final sentence also stops before completing its point. Use clearer grouping, such as describing the stable activities together and then the contrasting trends, and use linking words only when their relationship is accurate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of trend vocabulary, including “minor fluctuations,” “declined,” “remained constant” and “skyrocketed,” which helps communicate changes. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “highest number of involvement,” “largest proportion of declination” and “base year.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “sugre,” “noticebale” and “dramtically.” These do not prevent the general meaning from being understood, but they reduce precision and fluency. Prefer standard chart language and check spelling carefully; for example, describe participant numbers as rising or falling rather than referring to a “proportion” when the graph gives numbers.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and longer sentences with contrast, as in “while amateur dramatics…” and “Whereas, people participating in table tennis…”. Some sentence structures communicate the comparisons successfully, but errors in agreement, articles and sentence construction remain. For example, “Both film club and martial arts segment seems” should use a plural verb and clearer noun phrases, while “the highest number of involvement of people is on film club” has an awkward grammatical structure. The final sentence, “Consequently, Musical performances seems to attract the individuals from year 2005 the,” is incomplete and contains subject–verb disagreement. Aim for complete sentences, consistent past-tense reporting and careful agreement between subjects and verbs.

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