Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given graph illustrates the number of individuals participating in various activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia over a 20 year period from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, film club was consistently the most popular activity, while table tennis showed the most dramatic growth. In contrast, amaetur dramatics was the only activity to decline significantly.

Over the beginning period, film club was the most participated activity, starting from 64 participants in the year 2000 though it dipped slightly in 2010 then recovered to peak at about 66 by 2020. Martial arts, remained collectively stable fluctuating between 32 to 38 participants throughout the period.

On the other hand, table tennis started from roughly 16 participants but shot up to slightly more than 50 participants by 2020 overtaking both martial arts and amateur dramatics over the way. Musical performances attracted no participants in the first two periods, but rose gradually from 2010, reaching about 18 by the end.

In conclusion, people participating in numerous activities varied significantly over the years, with some activities becoming popluar than others. Film club remained one of the most poplar activities over the years while amaetur dramatics faced a sudden decline.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main patterns accurately: film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises sharply, and amateur dramatics declines. The overview is clear, and several figures are well selected, including film club’s start at 64 and finish at about 66, and musical performances’ rise to 18. This covers the task well, but some important comparisons are less fully developed. For example, table tennis overtakes martial arts by 2020, but the response does not specify when it moves ahead or compare their final figures directly. The claim that amateur dramatics was the “only activity to decline significantly” is broadly supported, though martial arts also fluctuates rather than showing a clear overall rise. A more precise overview and fuller comparison of the changing rankings would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall structure: an introduction, a clear overview, and paragraphs describing the main trends. The contrast between “On the other hand” and the preceding discussion helps signal a shift to the rising activities. However, some linking is mechanical or imprecise. “Over the beginning period” is unclear, and “overtaking both martial arts and amateur dramatics over the way” does not clearly explain the sequence of changes. The final paragraph repeats points already made in the overview and adds a broad conclusion rather than a new comparison. To improve progression, group the series by trend and use clearer references to time, such as “by 2015” or “over the final decade,” while avoiding a separate repetitive conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “consistently,” “fluctuating,” “recovered,” “shot up,” and “decline.” These choices make the main patterns understandable, and the response attempts some varied phrasing. However, several word choices or collocations are imprecise or too informal for an academic report: “most participated activity,” “shot up,” and “over the way.” There are also spelling errors in “amaetur” and “popluar,” and “poplar” appears in the conclusion. These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy and control. Prefer standard chart language such as “most popular activity,” “rose sharply,” and “overtaking,” and proofread carefully for spelling and repeated wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the trends remain clear. For instance, the overview uses a contrast structure, while the body includes clauses describing changes over time. Some grammatical errors remain. In “Martial arts, remained collectively stable,” the comma incorrectly separates the subject from its verb; “Martial arts remained relatively stable” is more accurate. “Starting from 64 participants … though it dipped” also has an unclear grammatical connection, and “from 32 to 38 participants” would be better expressed as “between 32 and 38 participants.” The final sentence, “some activities becoming popluar than others,” needs a comparative form such as “more popular.” More consistent control of sentence links, comparisons, and punctuation would improve accuracy.

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