Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the information about the number of participants who performed different activities at a social club in Melbourne, Australia from 200 to 2020.

Throughout the period, the number of participants for film club remained the leading category. The figure for amateur dramarics declined, but it rose for table tennis and musical performances. However, the number of participants for martial arts maintained relatively stable.

The figure for film club started just over 60 and fluctuated between 60 and 70 throughout the period. The number of participants for amateur dramatics was just under 20 in 2000, it increase slightly in 2005 before dropping at around of 10 in 2010. The figure for martial arts was about 26 in 2000 and it remained between 30 and 40 over the period.

The number of participants for musical performances began with zero in 2005, and it went on increasing over the period and reached a peak of about 17 in 2020. The figure for table tennis commenced with just over 10 in 2000, and it rose to 20 and maintained stable for next 10 years. Subsequently, it grew significantly over the period and went at 55 in 2020

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall patterns: film club remains the largest activity, amateur dramatics declines, and table tennis and musical performances rise. You also include relevant figures for several series. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: amateur dramatics was about 26 in 2000, not just under 20, and it fell to around 20 in 2010 rather than around 10. Martial arts began at about 36, not 26. Musical performances started at zero in 2000, not 2005. The overview is useful, but the account of the key comparisons is uneven, and the film-club description could note its slight dip followed by recovery. More precise reporting of the starting points and changes would make the summary more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a brief overview, and paragraphs describing the activities. This makes the main trends easy to locate, and linking expressions such as “However” and “Subsequently” help show contrast and sequence. The organisation is generally coherent, but the final paragraph groups musical performances and table tennis without a clear transition between the two series, while the preceding paragraph covers three other activities. Some connections between figures are also difficult to follow because several details are compressed into long sentences. Use a more consistent grouping—such as describing the stable or declining lines together, then the rising lines—and make each sentence’s subject explicit to improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task vocabulary, including “fluctuated,” “declined,” “maintained,” and “rose,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more precise descriptions such as “commenced” and “reached a peak.” However, some choices are inaccurate or awkward: “participants who performed different activities” suggests performance rather than participation, and “went at 55” is not a natural way to describe a figure. “Leading category” is understandable but less precise than “most popular activity” or “highest figure.” There is also a spelling error in “dramarics.” Aim for natural collocations and accurate activity names, and vary the verbs used to describe increases and stability.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the overall meaning can usually be understood. Some sentences are controlled, such as “The figure for film club started just over 60 and fluctuated between 60 and 70 throughout the period.” However, errors in verb forms and sentence construction remain: “it increase slightly” should be “it increased slightly,” and “The number … was just under 20 in 2000, it increase…” joins two clauses incorrectly. In “maintained stable,” the adjective needs a grammatical link, as in “remained stable.” There are also missing or awkward prepositions in phrases such as “fluctuated between” (with extra spacing) and “dropped at around of 10.” Check tense consistency, clause boundaries, and verb patterns when editing.

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