Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrates that the numbers of participants for distinct movements at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.

ovearall,table tennis and musical performances steadily increased through out the year . Although ameateur dramatics decline over the period.

in contrast, table tannis slowly increses from 2000 to 2010 .Furthmore gradully incerses around above 50 numbers of participants in 2020. As same true in muscial performances increses from around 0 to 50 participants in between 2005 to 2020.

Moreover, participant in flim club remains same froom

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant movements, including the rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics, but the response only minimally covers the graph. The overview is incomplete, and important comparisons are missing: for example, film club remained the most popular activity, while martial arts fluctuated around the mid-30s. Some figures are also inaccurate: musical performances rose to about 18 participants, not 50, and table tennis reached about 54 only by 2020. The final sentence about the film club is unfinished. The response is also 61 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to summarise the main features and support them with accurate details. Develop a complete overview and report the key trends accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then details, with linking expressions such as “in contrast” and “Moreover.” However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview and detail paragraphs are not clearly separated, and the final point stops mid-sentence (“remains same froom”). Some links do not show a clear relationship between ideas, while the repeated use of “increases” makes the account feel list-like. Group the activities by trend, use one paragraph for the overview and another for supporting comparisons, and complete each sentence. This would make the information easier to follow without relying on isolated connectors.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant graph-related terms, including “participants,” “increased,” “decline,” and “over the period,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the vocabulary is limited and several spelling errors make reading less smooth, such as “ameateur,” “tannis,” “increses,” and “muscial.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, including “distinct movements” for activities and “around above 50 numbers of participants.” Use accurate activity names and standard trend language, such as “rose to approximately 54 participants” or “fell steadily.” Checking spelling and choosing precise collocations would improve clarity and give you more flexibility when comparing the series.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and a contrast clause, as in “Although amateur dramatics decline over the period,” but grammatical control is inconsistent. Verb forms are often incorrect: “decline” should be “declined,” and “increases” is used where past-tense “increased” is needed for the completed period. The opening also has an awkward time construction (“between 2000 to 2020”), and several sentences lack complete or well-formed structures, particularly “As same true in musical performances…” and the unfinished final sentence. Punctuation and spacing around sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. Practise writing complete past-tense sentences first, then add accurate clauses with “while” or “whereas” to make comparisons.

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