Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the information about numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club was the most higher than other activities. Table tennis and musical performance was also increase. First five years musical performance was getting the straight line.

Firstly, film club was highest popular from the 2000, to around 65 numbers of participants. Table tennis completly increase by the 20 to 50 numbers around. Amateur drametics was the small increase at the year of 2005 and after that it was straightly decrease. The more lowest activity is amature drametics.

Secondly, martial arts was punctual in every year. At the year of 2015 and 2020 between it was not increase, highely it was gwoth 45 numbers around from 2010. The musical performance grow good but it was not higher in the competition,it was completly increase to the around 15 numbers of participant from the 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant patterns, including the film club’s leading position, the rise in table-tennis participation, and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: “Table tennis and musical performance was also increase” does not clearly summarise their different trends, and the claim that table tennis rose “by the 20 to 50” misses its approximate rise from 16 to 54. The martial-arts description is also inaccurate: it fluctuated around the mid-30s rather than growing to about 45. The response contains 142 words, below the required 150, so some trends and comparisons remain underdeveloped. Include a concise, accurate overview and support it with key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. “Firstly” and “Secondly” help signal the shift between groups of activities, and the reader can generally follow the topics being discussed. However, progression within paragraphs is not always clear, and the overview’s “First five years” sentence is disconnected from the main summary. Some links are difficult to interpret, such as “At the year of 2015 and 2020 between it was not increase,” while repeated use of “was” and “increase” makes the writing feel mechanical. Organise the details by clear trends, use accurate linking phrases, and ensure each sentence connects logically to the one before it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary such as “participants,” “activities,” “increase,” and “decrease,” so the main subject is usually recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear: “the most higher,” “punctual in every year,” and “grow good” do not express the intended comparisons naturally. Spelling errors such as “completly,” “drametics,” “amature,” and “gwoth” also reduce accuracy. Aim to use precise trend language and check spelling carefully. For example, describe a line as “remained stable” rather than “was punctual,” and use “rose steadily” or “fluctuated” where these match the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer constructions, and the opening sentence communicates the chart’s subject. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to understand. Examples include “Table tennis and musical performance was also increase,” which has problems with agreement and verb form, and “The more lowest activity is amature dramatics,” which uses an incorrect comparative structure. In “from the 2000, to around 65 numbers,” articles, prepositions, and sentence construction are also problematic. Most sentences rely on basic patterns, with limited accurate complex structures. Practise past-tense reporting, subject–verb agreement, and comparative forms, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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