Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph compares the participants at one social centre who take part in different activities in Melboiene, Australia, from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it can be seen that participation of people in film club was the highest for two decades. Whereas, other events saw fluctuations in their participants.

The film club participants in 2000 were approx 63 which saw a minnor decline in 2010, after that there was constant increase in the trend. On the other hand, the participation in musical performances were started in 2005, which saw a increase for 10 years,then the number become constant.

Moreover, table tennis saw a dramatical change in their participation trend as the number rose from 20 in 2010 to 52 in 2020. The intereset of people in martial arts saw a fluctuation for over two decades, the highest participants were in 2010. Lastly, the amateur dramatics saw a slight rose from 26 in 2000 to 29 in 2005 but then the number start declining and reached to less than 10 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall feature—that the film club remained the most popular activity—and report several important trends, including the sharp rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: musical performances began in 2010, not 2005, and their numbers continued to rise rather than becoming constant. Martial arts peaked in 2010, but its figures fluctuate around the mid-30s, a comparison that could be stated more precisely. The overview also says other events fluctuated, although table tennis and musical performances show clear upward trends. To strengthen the report, give a more accurate overview and support it with key figures across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the activities. Sequencing expressions such as “Overall,” “On the other hand,” “Moreover,” and “Lastly” help the reader follow the comparisons. The organisation is coherent, but some links are mechanical or do not express the relationship accurately. For example, “Whereas” is used as a sentence fragment after the overview, and “On the other hand” does not clearly contrast the film-club trend with musical performances. The final paragraph also moves through several activities without grouping trends consistently. Use complete linking structures and organise details by pattern—for example, rising activities together and declining or fluctuating ones together.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for describing data, including “participants,” “decline,” “fluctuation,” and “rose,” so the main trends are generally understandable. There are, however, noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “Melboiene,” “minnor,” “intereset,” and “dramatical.” Some collocations are also unnatural: “participation of people,” “a slight rose,” and “the number become constant” do not express the trends idiomatically. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling carefully. Phrases such as “the number of participants,” “a slight rise,” and “remained stable” would make the description clearer and more natural while retaining an appropriate academic tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a relative clause in “which saw a minor decline” and contrastive structures such as “but then.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “participation in musical performances were started” has incorrect agreement and passive construction, while “the number start declining” needs a past-tense verb. The sentence beginning “Whereas” is incomplete, and “after that there was constant increase” is missing an article. There are also punctuation issues, including missing spaces after commas. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and complete sentence structures, while checking subject–verb agreement and articles.

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