Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrate how many people in a social centre in Melbournr, Australia, has attented flim club, martial arts, amature dramatics, table tennis and musical performances from year 2000 to 2020.
Overall, majority of them liked the flim club. All of the acitivies had a upward trend but only amateur dramatics had downward trend. Musical performances was the least popular among them all.
The flim club showed a upward treand across the period, starting at aroud 65 people in 2000 but fir 10 years it went down to 60 people then it raise again to almot 70 people in 2020. As for martial it has flacuated throught the period it started with about 38 people and ended with around 39 people in 2020. It had its peak in 2010 having almost 40 people.
The amature dramatics had a downward tread and had it lowest in 2020 having only about 5 people.While table tennis had significant rise reaching about
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You identify the main categories and make an attempt at an overview, noting the film club’s popularity and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview is not accurate: “All of the activities had a upward trend” conflicts with the fluctuating martial-arts figures and the decline in amateur dramatics, while musical performances did not remain the least popular by 2020. Some figures are also misreported: the film club ends at about 66, not almost 70, and martial arts peaks around 38 in 2010 rather than almost 40. The response stops before completing the table-tennis comparison and omits the rise in musical performances. To improve, give a precise overview and report the key changes across all five activities.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs describing individual activities. Basic linking phrases such as “Overall,” “As for” and “While” help signal relationships. However, progression is incomplete: the final sentence ends after “reaching about,” leaving the table-tennis point unfinished and the musical-performances trend unreported. The overview also groups trends inaccurately, which makes the organisation of the information less clear. Some transitions connect ideas without fully developing them, and the paragraphing does not provide a complete account of the graph. Organise the details into clear comparisons—for example, stable or fluctuating activities versus those with strong rises or falls—and ensure each point is completed.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “fluctuated,” “downward trend,” “peak” and “significant rise,” so the reader can generally identify the intended trends. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors are noticeable, including “Melbournr,” “attented,” “flim,” “amature” and “flacuated.” Some word combinations are also imprecise: “majority of them liked” describes preference rather than the number of participants, and “had it lowest” is not a natural way to describe a minimum. Use accurate chart language such as “participant numbers,” “remained the most popular,” and “fell to a low of.” Careful proofreading and more precise trend vocabulary would make the report clearer and more appropriate to an academic summary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more developed sentences, including a contrast with “While table tennis…,” and the overall meaning is often recoverable. However, errors occur frequently in basic sentence construction and agreement. For example, “The line graph illustrate” needs a singular verb, and “has attented” does not fit the past-time period; “Musical performances was” also has incorrect agreement. Articles and verb forms are inconsistent in phrases such as “a upward trend” and “then it raise again.” Punctuation is also weak, with no space after the full stop in “people.While.” These recurring problems sometimes make the reader pause. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and subject–verb agreement, then proofread each sentence for articles and punctuation.
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