Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THIS GRPAH SHOWS HOW MANY INDIVIDUALS INDLGE IN VARIOUS ACTIVITIES AT SOCIAL CENTRE HELD IN MELBOURNE CITY OF AUSTRALIA FROM 2000 TILL 2020

THIS CHART ILLUSTRATES HOW ATHLETES PARTICIPATE IN SPORTS OVER CONFINED YEARS.HOWEVER,IN FILM CLUB PEOPLE SHOW THEIR INTEREST MORE AS COMPARED TO OTHERS,WHILE IN TABLE TENNIS IN 2000 NO OF PEOPLE WAS LESS BUT IN 2020 WAS DRAMATICALLY INCREASED.MOREOVER,FOR AMATEUR DRAMTICS IN 2000 PEOPLE LIKE IT BUT IN 2020 IT DECLINED.THE PREFERENCE OF OF MUSICAL PERFORMACE SHOWED INCREASED IN AS THE YEARS PASSES.THE INTEREST OF MARTIAL ARTS LOOKS A WAVY CHANGE IN INTEREST

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant overall patterns: the film club remains the most popular activity, table tennis rises substantially, amateur dramatics declines, and musical performances gain participants. However, the response is very brief and does not provide enough specific data or a clear, developed overview. For example, table tennis rises from about 16 to 54, while amateur dramatics falls from roughly 26 to 6; including such figures would make the comparisons convincing. The description of martial arts as showing a “wavy change” is vague, and the opening claim that the chart shows athletes participating in sports is inaccurate because several activities are not sports. The response also falls 55 words short of the required minimum. Develop the key trends with accurate figures and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response includes a basic sequence: an opening statement followed by comments on the activities, with linking words such as “However” and “Moreover.” This gives the reader some sense of how the ideas relate. However, the writing is presented as one continuous block, and there is no clear progression from an overview to organised details. The repeated pattern of naming an activity and making a brief claim makes the response feel like a list rather than a connected summary. Some links are also awkward or unclear, such as “However” before the film-club comparison and “as the years passes.” Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key details, and group activities with similar trends to create a clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “declined,” “increased,” “interest,” and “preference,” so the main trends can generally be understood. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. “Athletes participate in sports” does not accurately describe a chart that includes film and musical activities, while “wavy change in interest” is not a natural way to describe fluctuations. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “GRPAH,” “INDLGE,” “DRAMTICS,” and “PERFORMACE.” Use precise terms such as “participants,” “rose,” “fell,” and “fluctuated,” and check spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “while” and “as,” and the reader can identify the general subject of most statements. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors in sentence formation, verb forms, articles, and punctuation occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to read. In “the preference … showed increased,” the verb pattern is faulty; “as the years passes” has incorrect subject–verb agreement; and “in 2000 no of people was less” is not a well-formed comparison. The response also uses all-capital text and inconsistent spacing after punctuation. Practise accurate simple comparison structures first, then add clauses such as “while” or “whereas,” checking verb forms and sentence boundaries.

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