Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrats details on the number of participants of unique activities at one social center in melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, there was 5 different activities and 4 of them starts in year 2000 and another one is starts in 2005.In all the activities 4 of them had rose from start and 1 of those activite got fallen.

As graph illustrats when table tennis starts it only had 18 participants in 2000 but in period of 2010 it took huge increase and in year 2020 had almost 60 participants.The game called film clube got 64 participants form the begining and also the highest number of participant in all of the games also it got little up and down but in 2020 it stable and increase active participants.

Let's take look on 2 games called amateur dramatics and martial arts both games also start in 2000 but some reason one game got slide increase and another one got huge fall.The martial arts got slide increase and amateur dramatics got huge fall seens 2005.The last gaem is musical performances whitch started in 2005 whit 0 participants and also increase slowly 0 to 10 and 10 to 20 from 2005 to 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the five activities and include a clear overall contrast: film club remains the most popular, while amateur dramatics declines. You also report several relevant figures and trends, such as film club beginning at 64 and table tennis rising substantially. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear. Musical performances began in 2000, not 2005, and table tennis already had participants in 2000; it rose from about 16 to 54, rather than starting later and reaching almost 60. The overview also says four activities rose, although amateur dramatics fell and martial arts fluctuated around a similar level. More precise comparisons and a clearer account of the main changes would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to paragraphs describing the activities. Phrases such as “Overall” and “Let's take look” help signal shifts, and grouping amateur dramatics with martial arts gives the reader a useful comparison. However, the progression is sometimes difficult to follow because several trends are compressed into long sentences, and references such as “one game” and “another one” are not always immediately clear. The overview also conflicts with the later account of the trends. Use separate, focused sentences for each comparison and organise the details into clearer groups—for example, stable/high figures, rising activities, and the declining series.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a graph, including “participants,” “increase,” “fall,” and “highest number,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “unique activities,” “huge increase,” “slide increase,” and “stable and increase active participants.” Spelling errors—including “illustrats,” “begining,” and “gaem”—also reduce clarity and control. Aim for precise trend language and natural collocations: for example, describe a figure as “remained relatively stable” or “rose sharply,” rather than using vague phrases such as “got huge fall.” Check spelling carefully, especially for activity names and common reporting verbs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the main message is usually recoverable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur in several places. For example, “there was 5 different activities” should use a plural verb, while “4 of them starts” needs a past-tense form. The sentence beginning “As graph illustrats” also lacks an article and becomes difficult to follow as clauses are joined together. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops and commas. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build comparisons as complete, clearly punctuated sentences; this will help your ideas come across without the reader having to interpret the grammar.

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