Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustrate the information onthe members of participants for different activities at one social centre in melbourne , australia for the period different years into 2000 to 2020.

In an overview in the line graph the highest number of participant , by activity 2000 - 2020 is table tennis , and the lowest number of participants by sctivity 2000 - 2020 is film club

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes an attempt to introduce the graph and provide an overview, but it does not accurately identify the main features. It says table tennis had the highest participation and film club the lowest; in fact, film club was highest throughout, while amateur dramatics was lowest by 2020. No figures, changes over time, or meaningful comparisons are reported, so the task is addressed only minimally. The response is also substantially below the required 150 words: it contains 50 words, with 15 words copied from the prompt excluded from the count. To improve, give a clear overview of the contrasting trends, then support it with selected figures—for example, table tennis rose sharply while amateur dramatics declined.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction and an overview, with the phrase “In an overview” signalling a shift in purpose. However, the two short paragraphs do not develop a logical account of the graph, and the overview repeats the task’s wording rather than connecting specific trends or comparisons. The first sentence is difficult to follow, particularly “different years into 2000 to 2020,” and the second does not clearly explain the relationship between the activities. Use a concise introduction, a separate overview, and one or two detail paragraphs grouped by trend. Linking expressions such as “whereas” or “by contrast” can help make comparisons clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “line graph,” “participants,” and “activities,” so the topic is recognisable. However, vocabulary is very limited and some choices are inaccurate or repetitive. “Members of participants” is not a natural way to describe the data, and “highest number of participant” is imprecise when comparing participation figures. There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “sctivity” and “melbourne.” Build a wider range of task-specific language for describing trends and comparisons, such as “rose sharply,” “declined steadily,” and “remained relatively stable.” Check spelling and use “number of participants” consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts two sentences and uses a basic introductory structure, but grammatical control is inconsistent. The opening has a subject–verb agreement error in “The line graph illustrate,” and the phrase “the period different years into 2000 to 2020” does not form a clear grammatical time expression. In the overview, “the highest number of participant” has a number-agreement problem, and the sentence structure makes the intended comparison difficult to follow. The range is also very limited, with no developed complex sentences. Practise accurate simple clauses first, then combine trends using structures such as “While film-club attendance remained high, table-tennis participation increased.”

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