Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph represents on the number of players for various activities at one social centre in Melbourne , Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall,film club had the largest participants throughout the period,Martial arts been fluctuated in the given period, although Amateur dramatics fell sharply.In addition,table tennis had the lowest but it increased sharply after 2010.Muscial performances seen upward trend .
An analysis of the image reveals that in 2000,the participants about 65 the highest.Followed by Martial arts at about 38 players in 2000 this figure rose to 40 in 2010 and a variation for another 10 years.
An evident of the image proven that Amateur dramatics it is roughly 28 in 2000 and then to about 5 players in 2020.Table tennis it is started at 18 players then slowly this figure grows to more than 50 participants by 2020.And last musical performances there are only 0 participants in 2005 tge participations are added and increased to 20 by the yera 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify several important patterns: the film club remains the largest activity, amateur dramatics declines, and table tennis rises strongly after 2010. However, the overview is incomplete and includes an inaccurate comparison: table tennis starts as the lowest, but musical performances are lower in 2000 and remain at zero in 2005. Some figures and trends are also imprecise; for example, martial arts reaches about 38 in 2010, not 40, and the response does not clearly report its later fluctuations. Musical performances begin in 2000, rather than only being described as zero in 2005. The response is 149 words, one word below the 150-word minimum. Add a clearer overview and support it with accurate comparisons across the period.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and it groups some related activities together. However, progression is not consistently clear: the final paragraph moves from amateur dramatics to table tennis and then musical performances without clear transitions, while the earlier detail paragraph focuses on film club and martial arts. Linking phrases such as “An analysis of the image reveals” and “An evident of the image proven” are repetitive and do not clearly signal comparisons. Punctuation spacing also makes the text harder to follow. Organise the details into clearer groups, such as the declining activities and the rising or stable ones, and use concise, accurate links between them.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “increased sharply,” “fell sharply” and “upward trend,” so the reader can understand the main subject and some changes. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “largest participants,” “had the lowest,” and “a variation for another 10 years.” “Players” is also less suitable than “participants” for activities such as film club and musical performances. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “Muscial,” “tge” and “yera,” which reduce clarity and control. Aim for precise trend language and check spelling; for example, describe a figure as “the highest number of participants” and say it “fluctuated” rather than “had a variation.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts a few longer structures, including “although Amateur dramatics fell sharply,” but sentence construction is often faulty and the range remains limited. Errors include the opening phrase “represents on the number,” the incomplete construction “Martial arts been fluctuated,” and “An evident of the image proven that,” which make relationships between ideas unclear. Articles, agreement and verb forms are also problematic in phrases such as “the participants about 65” and “it is started at 18 players.” Several sentences run together without appropriate spacing after commas or full stops. Use straightforward, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check articles and tense—for example, “The figure started at about 16 and rose to 54 by 2020.”
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