Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The supplied line graph provides data about the figure of people for a wide range of activities at a single social centre located in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club remained the most popular activity throughout the period. The participants figure flutuated slightly. In contrast, Amateur dramatics experienced a dramatic fall. It declined to the lowest figure at last. Meanwhile, table tennis rose exceptionally high. Moreover, Martial arts remained almost the same with slight fluctuations throught the period. Musical performance was initially low but it gradually increased.

According to the given data, Film club has been the most popular and demanded among all activities.Table tennis was initially low with almost 15 people but it got it's highest point in 2020 which was about 55 participants. Moreover, Martial arts remained in between with slight changes. The number of participants remained between 30 to 40 throught the period. Amateur dramatics had about 30 people at start but it was declined heavily in the last year. Meanwhile, Musical performances was quite low initially and it rose gradually and reach upto 15 people in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main patterns accurately: the film club stays highest, table tennis rises sharply, amateur dramatics declines, and martial arts fluctuates within a narrow range. The overview is clear, and the figures for table tennis and martial arts are broadly consistent with the graph. This gives the response a solid account of the task, with some features reported more fully than others. To make the summary more complete and precise, include key stages or endpoint figures for the film club and musical performances, and clarify that amateur dramatics falls from about 26 to 6 rather than saying only that it declined heavily. The overview already captures the major contrasts, but selective supporting data would develop it further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph with supporting details. The main trends are grouped sensibly, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” and “Meanwhile” help signal comparisons. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical because several sentences repeat the same point, particularly that the film club was most popular and that martial arts changed only slightly. There is also a missing space after “activities.” before “Table tennis,” which interrupts the flow. Improve progression by using the final paragraph to add distinct evidence rather than restating the overview, and connect related comparisons more smoothly. Clearer referencing and less repetitive linking would make the organisation more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “fluctuated,” “dramatic fall,” “rose,” and “slight fluctuations.” These choices make the main movements understandable, and the response attempts some more descriptive language. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “the figure of people,” “rose exceptionally high,” and “most popular and demanded.” There are also spelling errors, including “flutuated” and “throught,” and inconsistent singular/plural forms in phrases such as “Musical performance(s).” Aim for accurate, conventional chart language and check spelling carefully. More precise verbs and collocations would help you describe changes without relying on broad or awkward phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and some more complex forms, including contrastive clauses beginning “In contrast” and “Meanwhile.” Most of the intended meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “between 2000 to 2020” uses the wrong paired preposition, and “it was declined heavily” has an incorrect passive construction; write “it declined sharply.” Tense control is also inconsistent: “Film club has been” shifts to the present perfect when the chart describes a completed period, while “it rose gradually and reach” mixes past and present forms. There are also agreement and article issues, as in “Musical performances was.” Review verb forms, agreement, and preposition patterns to improve accuracy while retaining varied sentence structures.

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