Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates about the participants who worked for many activities at a particular social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The film club had the highest number of participants in one social centre from 2000 to 2020.

The graph shows film club had the highest number of participants almost 65 in 2000 and it shows ups and downs. After 20 years it shows a little change and remain just above than 65. The martial arts which was started approximately from 36 and it also shows ups and downs. After 20 years it is remain constant at 36. Amarture daramatics was started almost from 26 and shows slighlty up in next year but after 2005 it was decrease continues and at the end of 2020 it reached below than 10. Table tennis was started approximately from 17 and it slowly increased for next two years but after 2010 the number increased rapidly and cross the line of 50. At last the musical performance which was started in 2005 from zero but in next five years it increased and reached approximately at 17 numbers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main overall feature that the film club remained the largest activity, and you cover all five series, including the sharp rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview is limited to the film club’s ranking and does not clearly summarise the contrasting trends across the period. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: film-club participation dipped slightly before rising, rather than simply showing “ups and downs”; musical performances began at zero in 2000, not 2005; and table tennis rose sharply after 2010, reaching about 54 by 2020. The response therefore reports relevant information but only partially selects and presents the key features. A clearer overview and more precise descriptions of changes would strengthen it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, a brief statement about the leading activity, and descriptions of the individual lines. This makes the general subject understandable. However, the organisation is not consistently clear, as most of the data are placed in one long paragraph and the repeated pattern of “The graph shows…” or “After 20 years…” makes the account feel list-like. Some links between time points are also imprecise, such as “in next five years” and “after 2010,” which can make the progression difficult to follow. Grouping the activities by trend—for example, rising, falling, and relatively stable—and using clearer time references would create a more coherent progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “increased rapidly,” “reached,” and “constant,” so the main trends can generally be understood. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “participants who worked for many activities,” “started approximately from,” and “cross the line of 50.” Spelling errors in “Amarture daramatics” and “slighlty” also reduce accuracy, while “numbers” is less suitable than “participants” for describing the figures. Aim for precise trend language and accurate activity names, using expressions such as “the number of participants stood at,” “rose to,” and “exceeded 50.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates the broad trends, but grammatical control is uneven and the sentence structures are mostly simple, with some longer sentences that become faulty. For example, “After 20 years it is remain constant at 36” has an incorrect verb form, while “it slowly increased for next two years” is missing an article and has an unclear time reference. The opening phrase, “illustrates about the participants,” is also not grammatically well formed. There are attempts to connect clauses with “but” and “after,” yet punctuation and sentence boundaries are not always controlled. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build longer sentences around clear subjects and verbs, while checking articles, agreement, and punctuation.

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