Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates about the number of participants that took part in activities at social centre in melbourne, australia between 2000 to 2020.

It shows many activities such as film club had 65 numbers of people took a part in 2000 and it was a neutral and steady over the period of 2010 till 2020. Whereas, in martial arts 38 participants where selected in 2000 and all this it shows the minor changes in the overall period. It dropped a little to 32 and 33 in the year 2005 and 2015.

Amateur dramatics had a changes in the two decades as it was started with the 28 participants and after 2005 it drastically slopped down in the followed years with participants 2 or 3 in 2020.

Table tennis had a intresting participants after 2010. It was started with only 15 peoples and it doomed after 2010 with 45 participants in 2015 to 50+ in 2020. Musical performmances activities took place in 2005 with 0 participants and had a good amount peoples taking part into it.10 people in 2010 and had almost 20 people till 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover all five activities and identify several broad patterns, including the rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the report only partially fulfils the task because some key figures and trends are inaccurate or unclear. For example, film club participation stayed around 60–66, rather than being “neutral,” and amateur dramatics fell to about 6 in 2020, not 2 or 3. Table tennis rose to approximately 54, while musical performances began in 2000 at zero, rather than first taking place in 2005. There is also no clear overview that highlights the main contrasts across the period. Select the most important overall trends, then support them with accurate comparisons and representative figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response is divided into paragraphs and generally discusses the activities in a recognisable order, so the reader can follow its broad subject. However, progression between points is not consistently clear, and linking expressions sometimes create confusing relationships. For instance, “Whereas, in martial arts” does not clearly connect the comparison to the film-club figures, while “all this it shows” makes the sentence difficult to follow. The final paragraph also combines table tennis and musical performances without a clear transition. Use a brief overview followed by logically grouped details, and make each paragraph focus on a clear comparison or trend. More precise links such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile” would help when used to show the intended relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “participants,” “period,” and “changes,” and attempt to describe movement with phrases such as “dropped a little.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the data difficult to interpret. “Neutral and steady” is not a natural way to describe a largely stable figure, and “doomed” does not convey the sharp rise in table tennis. There are also noticeable spelling and form errors, including “intresting” and “performmances.” Build a reliable set of trend verbs and comparison phrases, and check spelling and collocations so that your descriptions are both accurate and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, but the range of structures is limited and these attempts often contain errors that make relationships unclear. For example, “The graph illustrates about the number” has an unnecessary preposition, and “Amateur dramatics had a changes” has incorrect article and number agreement. In “it was started with the 28 participants,” the sentence structure and article use are also faulty. Several sentences lack clear punctuation or have incomplete connections, as in “10 people in 2010 and had almost 20 people till 2020.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses using “while,” “whereas,” or “which.” Check articles, plurals, verb forms, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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