Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The illustration gives us information about number of participants perform five type of activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia in the period of 2000 to 2020.

Overall, in 2020 biggest ratio of participants are seen in film club. In contrast, amateur dramatics was on the lowest ratio

In 2000, around 65 paticipants are seen in film club and in 2020 the participants remain almost on same amount. 36 participants are seen in martial arts in 2000 which shows some decrease, in 2005 to 30 members and in 2020 remained stable to 35 members.

In amateur dramatics 26 participants uses in 2000 and in 2005, 28 members after this it decreased fastly in coming years till 2020, around 5 participants were seen. Furthermore, in 2000 table tennis was used by 6 participants and till 2010 it remaind same but after this in next years it climbed sharply. In 2020 50 participants uses this activity. Besides this, musical performances are not seen in 2000, it was started in 2005 and in 2010 ten members was invoved and later in 2020, 19 participants was seen.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all five activities and identify the main contrast: film club has the highest participation in 2020, while amateur dramatics is lowest. Several trends are also reported accurately, including the decline in amateur dramatics and the sharp rise in table tennis after 2010. However, some figures and timings are misread: table tennis starts at about 16 participants, not 6, and musical performances begin in 2010, not 2005. The film-club figures are broadly accurate, but the overview could better highlight table tennis’s substantial growth and martial arts’ relative stability. This is a relevant summary, though some features are less fully and precisely reported than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a brief overview, and then details about the activities. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “In contrast,” “Furthermore,” and “Besides this” help signal relationships. However, the overview is very brief, and the body moves from one activity to another without grouping the main trends, so comparisons between series are limited. Some linking phrases feel mechanical, and references such as “after this” and “in coming years” are not always precise about the period being discussed. Organising the details into clearer groups—for example, rising activities and declining or stable ones—would strengthen progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a line graph, including “decreased,” “remained stable,” and “climbed sharply,” and the reader can generally understand the trends you intend to report. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are unnatural, such as “biggest ratio,” “participants uses,” and “was used by” for participation in activities. Spelling errors, including “paticipants” and “remaind,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise graph language and consistent forms, such as “the number of participants,” “participated in,” and “rose.” This would make the description more natural and clearer without requiring more complicated vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the response is generally understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “participants perform five type” needs a grammatical structure such as “participants in five types,” while “36 participants are seen” and “19 participants was seen” do not consistently use appropriate tense or subject–verb agreement. The sentence about table tennis also combines several time references in a confusing structure. Use past simple consistently for the historical data, check singular and plural agreement, and divide long sentences where needed. More accurate control of these patterns would make your comparisons easier to follow.

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