Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given line graph illustrates number of participant taking part in various activities at one social centre in Melbrourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Looking from overall perspective, it is readily apparent that film culb was dominating throughout the period with most participants. While muscial performances was at lowest during starting years and inreased gradually after 5 years. Whereas table tennis shows sharp boost after 2010. In contrast amateur dramatics decline gradually while martial art was flactuating throughout the period.

In 2000 the film club was the dominating catogery nearly 65 particpants and its remain on top till 2020 with nearly 70 members. while musical performances was at 0 till 2005 and dsipaly a graduall increase with almost 10 in 2010 and nearly 15 in 2015 and almost 20 particpant in 2020. Whereas, martial arts participants were flactuating during the period and remain in between 30 to 40 from 2000 to 2020.

While the particpants of table tennis were aproximatly 15 in 2000 and shows a sharp increase after 2010 and reach a

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important patterns: the film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises sharply after 2010, and amateur dramatics declines. The overview also notes that martial arts fluctuates and musical performances begin at zero. However, the report is incomplete: it ends mid-sentence just as the table-tennis trend is being described, and the steep fall in amateur dramatics is not supported with figures or a clear endpoint. Some figures are also imprecise, such as film-club participation reaching “nearly 70” rather than about 66. To strengthen coverage, finish the comparison and report the main changes accurately, especially the table-tennis rise to about 54 and amateur dramatics’ fall to about 6.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to details, and the activities are generally grouped in a sensible way. However, progression becomes difficult to follow because several sentences begin with “While” or “Whereas” without completing a clear contrast, and the final paragraph stops mid-sentence. The overview also strings together trends rather than organising them into a clear comparison of rising, falling and relatively stable activities. Use complete sentences, group related series together, and connect each paragraph’s details to the overview. A finished final paragraph would make the report feel more coherent and complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant trend vocabulary, including “dominating,” “fluctuating,” “sharp increase” and “gradually,” which helps communicate the main movements. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings reduce precision, including “dominating category” for the activity with the most participants and “sharp boost” for a rise in numbers. There are also repeated spelling errors such as “particpants,” “flactuating” and “gradually” misspelled, alongside “Melbrourne.” These errors do not make the overall topic impossible to understand, but they make the report less clear and polished. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some complex sentence patterns, particularly with “While” and “Whereas,” but these are often not formed as complete, well-controlled sentences. For example, “While musical performances was at lowest…” is a dependent clause, and “Whereas table tennis shows…” is also left without a main clause. There are frequent problems with articles, agreement and verb forms, as in “illustrates number,” “performances was,” and “its remain on top.” Sentence boundaries and capitalisation are also inconsistent. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise writing complete simple sentences first, then combine them with accurate contrast clauses and consistent past-tense reporting.

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