Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph below show the information on the numbers of participants for the activities film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramaties, Table tennis, Musical performances, at one social center in melbourne, australia for the year 2000 to 2020.

First of all, the activities the numbers of participants the show the year of 2000 first activity film club about 64%, Martial arts show the about 37%, Amateur dramaties 25%, Table tennis 15%, and the last activity musical performance not show the percentage.

Theyear of 2005 show the film club about 63%, martial arts about 32%, Amateur dramatics 29%, Table tennis increase the about 39%, Musical performance show the 0%.

The year of 2010 show the film club 62%, Martial arts 39%, Amateur dramaties 20%, Table tennis same 39%, and musical performance show the 12%. And the year of 2015 show the percentages of the activities the first activity film club about 69%, Martial arts 38%, Amateur dramaties decrease the number of 12%, table tennis increase the 39%, and the last activite musical performances 16%,

And the last year of 2020 show the film club 69%, Marital arts 39%, Amateur dramaties more decrease 5%, Table tennis increase the about 55%, musical performance 20%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify all five activities and report figures across the full period, so the response is relevant to the chart. However, several values are inaccurate: for example, table tennis was about 20 in 2005, not 39, and film club was about 64 in 2015, not 69. The figures are also repeatedly described as percentages, although the graph shows numbers of participants. Most importantly, there is no clear overview of the main trends, such as table tennis rising sharply, amateur dramatics declining, and film club remaining the most popular activity. The response therefore reports selected details but only partially fulfils the task of summarising the key features. Add a concise overview and check the data carefully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows the years in chronological order, which gives the reader a basic route through the information, and phrases such as “The year of 2010” signal changes in time. However, the writing is presented as one long sequence rather than clearly organised paragraphs, and there is no separate overview to guide the reader. Repeated openings such as “The year of…” and “show” make the progression mechanical. Some sentences also combine several activities without clear punctuation, so comparisons are difficult to follow. Grouping the main trends into an overview and then one or two detail paragraphs would create a clearer progression. Use linking language to compare activities, rather than listing each series year by year.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “increase,” “decrease,” and “about,” and the activity names make the subject clear. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated or imprecise. “Show” is used frequently where “stood at,” “rose to,” or “fell to” would describe the data more naturally. Calling the figures “percentages” is also an inaccurate word choice because the chart reports participant numbers. Spelling errors such as “dramaties,” “activite,” and “Marital” reduce accuracy, while “the last activity musical performance not show the percentage” is difficult to interpret. Build a small set of accurate trend verbs and practise spelling the chart labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe several data points in connected sentences, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The graph below show” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “the activities the numbers of participants the show” lacks a clear sentence structure. Verb forms and articles are also often missing or incorrect, as in “Table tennis increase the about 39%.” Most sentences rely on repeated simple patterns, with little accurate use of more varied structures. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense forms for the historical data. Careful punctuation and sentence boundaries would also make the information easier to understand.

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