Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrates the information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the participation in film club was the highest in whole time period and the lowest was in musical performance initially which increase. In the end of time period the lowest participation was in amateur dramatics.

In 2000, there were 65 candidates that participated in film club which was remained stable till 2020. Then number of participants in martial arts in 2000 were below 40 and there was a slight change in it however, it was at same level in 2020. The major change was seen in amateur dramatics the number of participants in it were below 30 in 2000 which then went down dramatically and were below 10 in 2020. Then comes table tennis there were below 20 participants in it in 2000 which increased to 20 in 2010 and then it abruptly surged to 50 in 2020.

At last musical performances comes there was no participation in it in 2000 it started in 2005 and then it steadily climbed up. Finally in 2020 the number of participants that took part in it were almost 20.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall pattern: film club remains the most popular activity, while amateur dramatics becomes the least popular by 2020. You also cover all five activities and report several relevant changes, including the sharp rise in table tennis and the later growth of musical performances. This supports a response that addresses the task, though some details are less fully or accurately developed. For example, film-club participation did not remain stable throughout: it dipped slightly before rising to about 66. Musical performances began to attract participants in 2010, not 2005. Include a clearer overview of the contrasting trends and use selected figures at key points to make comparisons more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs describing the data. The reader can generally follow the sequence of activities, and time references such as “In 2000” and “Finally in 2020” help locate information. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is sometimes mechanical: repeated “Then” and “At last” make the account read like a list rather than a connected comparison. Some references are also unclear, as in “it was at same level,” where the activity and comparison point could be stated more directly. Grouping the activities by trend—for example, relatively stable series versus those that changed substantially—and using more precise linking would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for describing a line graph, including “went down dramatically,” “steadily climbed up” and “surged.” These choices communicate the broad direction and scale of change. However, some wording is repetitive or imprecise, such as “number of participants” appearing frequently and “there was a slight change in it,” which does not specify the movement. A few collocations are unnatural, including “in the end of time period” and “at same level.” Choose concise graph language and vary it where appropriate, while ensuring the description matches the data. For instance, “remained broadly stable” is more precise for martial arts than “a slight change,” and “rose sharply” is a natural alternative to “abruptly surged.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the overall meaning is usually understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction are frequent enough to limit accuracy. Examples include “which was remained stable,” “which increase,” and “the number … were below 30”; these should use appropriate tense and singular agreement. Articles are also missing in phrases such as “at same level,” and several long sentences joined by “Then” would be clearer if divided or punctuated more carefully. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and subject–verb agreement, then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb. More reliable control of these patterns would make your range easier to follow.

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