Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given graph illustrates the data about multiple participants for variety of activities in Melbourne, Australia at social center from 2000 to 2020.

Where film club have highest number of participants in whole time periods. Participation from musical performance show the lowest rate than others who flactuate within medium numbers.

In the begining, All the activities perform at social center except musical performances. Where Table tennis had 15 participants, 25 from amateur dramatics and almost 35 from martial arts. As film club had highest participants approximatly 64 at the time of 2000, also have same number of participants till 2020 with littile fluctuation. Martial art also fluctuate within 30 to 40 from whole time periods. Amateur dramatics had almost 25 participants from 2000 to 2005, After 2005 Suddenly follow the decreasing trends as 20 in 2010, 10 in 2015 and almost 5 numbers in 2020. Table tennis start from almost 15 till 2010 and then gradually follow the increasing trends with 35 participants in 2015 and 50 in 2020. The musical performance start from 2005 and show the increasing trend with 10 participants in 2010 and 12 in 2015 and almost 15 in 2020. In 2010 Amateurs dramatics and table tannis have same number of paricipants like martial arts and table tennis also same in 2015 with almost 35 participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall pattern that the film club remained the most popular activity, while amateur dramatics declined and table tennis rose substantially. You also include relevant comparisons, such as the equal figures for amateur dramatics and table tennis in 2010 and the similar martial arts and table tennis totals in 2015. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: musical performances began in 2010, not 2005, and rose to about 18 by 2020 rather than 15. Film-club participation fluctuated slightly, from about 64 to 60 and back to 66, rather than staying at roughly the same level throughout. The overview also calls musical performances the lowest, although amateur dramatics ends lower. More precise selection and reporting of these features would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a brief overview and a longer paragraph describing the figures. The reader can follow the broad trends, and time markers such as “in 2010” and “in 2015” help locate comparisons. However, progression is weakened by sentence fragments beginning “Where,” including “Where Table tennis had 15 participants,” and by repeated or awkward linking, such as “also have same number” and “also same in 2015.” The final sentence revisits comparisons without a clear connection to the preceding account. Organise the body into clearer groups—for example, declining and rising activities—and use complete sentences with explicit references to the relevant series. This would make the progression more consistent and reduce the impression of loosely connected details.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of trend vocabulary, including “decreasing trends,” “increasing trend,” “fluctuate,” and “participants,” so the main information is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language, such as “illustrates” and “approximately.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “multiple participants for variety of activities,” “perform at social center,” and “lowest rate than others” do not express the intended comparisons clearly. Spelling errors such as “flactuate,” “begining,” “littile,” and “paricipants” also reduce control. Aim for precise chart language, such as “the number of participants,” “attendance rose,” and “the lowest figure,” and check spelling before submitting. This would make your vocabulary more accurate and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the reader can usually understand the trends being described. Some time clauses and comparisons are also attempted, for example, “After 2005… as 20 in 2010, 10 in 2015.” However, sentence construction and control are inconsistent. “Where film club have highest number” is a fragment with incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “As film club had highest participants… also have same number” combines clauses without a complete, controlled structure. Articles and plurals are often missing or inconsistent, as in “at social center” and “all the activities perform.” Punctuation and capitalisation also interrupt flow, particularly after “2005.” Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles and tense consistency; this will make the range you attempt more reliable.

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