Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of participants in five different activities at a social center in Melbourne, Austraillia, between 2000 and 2020.

Overall film club have highest number of participants throughout the years, while table tennies having the most growth since 2000 to 2020. Other than that amateur dramatics getting the most decreased throughout the years and martial arts being constant at the same pace for number of participents.

Firstly musical instruments had no participants till 2010 then a increase of 10% in 2020, while table tennis with most growth from being below 20% in 2000 to growing at above 50% in 2020, meanwhile amateur getting a biggest fall from 25% in 2000 to nearly 5% only in 2020 for number of participants.

Lastly not much change in martial arts and film club being at 45% in 2000 to 43% in 2020 for martial arts, while most number of participants in film club at 65% in 2000 to slightly down in 2010 then slightly incease at 67% in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall patterns: film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises markedly, and amateur dramatics declines. Several figures are also broadly consistent with the graph, including table tennis increasing from below 20 to above 50 and amateur dramatics falling to around 5–6. This gives the response a relevant overview and coverage of the main series. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the graph reports participant numbers, not percentages, and martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s rather than staying at “45%” and then “43%.” The musical-performances trend is also described imprecisely. To strengthen the response, report values as participants and compare the series more accurately, especially where their levels change over time.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to two detail paragraphs. Sequencing words such as “Overall,” “Firstly,” and “Lastly” help signal these stages, and the reader can follow the broad trends being discussed. However, the progression within paragraphs is sometimes awkward: the second paragraph combines musical performances, table tennis, and amateur dramatics in a long sentence, while the final paragraph shifts between martial arts and film club without a clear comparison. Some linking phrases, including “Other than that” and “meanwhile,” do not express the relationships precisely. Grouping the rising activities together and the declining or relatively stable ones together would make the comparisons clearer and cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “growth,” “decreased,” “fall,” and “throughout,” so the main trends are generally understandable. There is also some attempt to vary expressions for change, such as “growing” and “slightly increase.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise: “musical instruments” does not match the chart’s “musical performances,” “most decreased” is unnatural, and “at the same pace” does not clearly describe a fluctuating series. Repeated use of “participants” and “number” also limits flexibility. Spelling errors such as “Austraillia,” “tennies,” and “participents” further reduce control. Use precise trend language and check spelling of key chart terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including a complex overview with “while” and longer comparisons using “from … to ….” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but grammatical control is uneven. For example, “film club have highest number” has subject–verb agreement and article problems, while “table tennies having the most growth” is not a complete clause. The phrase “then a increase” also has an article error, and several sentences lack clear grammatical structure or punctuation, particularly the final paragraph. These issues sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Aim for complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries when combining comparisons.

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