Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the data on the figure of active participants in five various activities at single social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club remained at the top with the highest number of participations. Amateur dramatics started positively but the number of members fell drastically at the end of decade.

The musical performances participants increased with the time. Other activities participation fluctuated over the time.

Firstly, the film club sector got the highest number of participations.In 2000, its number started from around 65 and slightly fluctuated in 2 decades. The film club registered around 66 total members in 2020. In 2000, the martial art started from around 37 participants and fluctuated over the time.In 2020, the total number of participants registered around 36.

Secondly, the amateur dramatics participants number was around 27 in 2000. the number of participants fell to 20 in 2010. In 2020, it recorded its lowest number around 6 members.

Musical performances appeard in 2005 and reached number to around 10 in 2010

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important features, including the film club’s consistently high participation and the sharp decline in amateur dramatics. The figures you give for these activities are broadly consistent with the graph. However, the summary is only partial: table tennis, which rose markedly from about 16 to 54 and became the second-largest activity, is not reported at all. The musical performances account is also incomplete and inaccurate: this activity began in 2010, not 2005, and rose to about 18 by 2020, but you stop at its 2010 figure. The overview mentions fluctuation without specifying which series changed in this way. Covering the major trends and comparing the activities more clearly would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs. Sequencing words such as “Overall,” “Firstly” and “Secondly” help signal the stages of the report. However, the progression is limited because the details are grouped mainly by “Firstly” and “Secondly” rather than organised to compare the main trends. Table tennis is omitted, leaving a major gap in the account, and the final sentence about musical performances feels unfinished. Some linking is repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “In 2000” and “In 2020.” Organise the body around contrasting patterns—for example, stable/high figures, rising figures and declining figures—and use clearer links between related comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “participants,” “fluctuated,” “drastically” and “lowest number,” so the reader can generally understand the trends you describe. However, the range is limited by repeated or unnatural expressions such as “number of participations,” “total members” and “started from.” Some word choices are imprecise: the graph counts participants, not “members,” and “sector” is not a natural label for an activity. There are also spelling errors, including “appeard,” and the phrase “reached number to” is awkward. Aim for accurate collocations such as “the number of participants stood at” and “rose to,” and vary the language used to describe increases, declines and stability.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, grammatical errors occur frequently and sometimes make the report less clear. Examples include missing articles in “at single social centre” and “in 2 decades,” and the sentence fragment-like construction “The musical performances participants increased with the time.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent: “the number” begins a sentence with a lowercase letter, and there are missing spaces after full stops in “participations.In” and “time.In.” Use a wider range of controlled sentence patterns, check articles and sentence boundaries, and make sure each sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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