Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
THIS GRAPH SHOWS TREND OF NUMBER OF PARTICIPANTS OF VARIOUS ACTIVITIES AT A SOCIAL CENTRE LOCATED IN MELBOURNE OF 2 DECADES.
MORE OR LESS 70 PARTICIPANTS WERE TOTAL WHO PARTICIPATED IN ACTIVITIES LIKE FILM CLUB WHICH SHOWED OVERALL CONSTANT WITH THE MOST NUMBER OF PARTICIPANTS WHEREAS TABLE TENNIS SURGE AFTER 2010 NEVERTHELESS AMATEUR DRAMATICS VISIBILY SLIPS DOWN FROM SAME YEAR
TABLE TENNIS SLIGHLTY SURGES FROM 2000 TO 2005 THEN REMAIN BALANCED FOR NEXT 5 YEAR AFTER 2010 IT SURGED TO 55 PARTICIPANTS FROM 20.MUSICAL PERFORMANCE STARTED ITS JOURNEY FROM 2005 AND GRADUAL INCREASING PATTERN HAS BEEN SHOWN TILL 2020 WITH 15 PARTICIPANTS.
INCONTRAST AMATEUR DRAMATICS SLIGHTLY UPLIFTED TILL 2005 THEN GRADUAL DOWNFALL STARTED AND LEFT WITH LESS THAN 10 PARTICIPANTS IN 2020
FURTHERMORE, FILM CLUB AND MARTIAL ARTS REMAINED ALMOST CONSTANT WITH SLIGHT FLUCTUTATION FROM 2000 TO 2020 ALMOST 60- 70 PARTICIPANT WERE PARTICIPATING IN FILM CLUB WHEREAS 30-40 PARTICIPANTS WERE INVOLVED IN MARTIAL ARTS ACTIVITES.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify several important patterns: film club remains the most popular activity, table tennis rises sharply after 2010, and amateur dramatics declines to fewer than ten participants by 2020. These observations are broadly supported by the graph. However, the overview is not fully clear, and some details are inaccurate or imprecise. For example, film club is described as having “more or less 70” participants, although its figures are around 60–66; musical performances began in 2010, not 2005; and table tennis reaches about 54 in 2020, rather than 55 after 2010. The response covers the main trends but does not consistently report the data accurately or distinguish the starting and ending points.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has some organisation: it begins with a general statement, discusses table tennis and musical performances, then contrasts amateur dramatics with the more stable activities. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and the paragraphing is limited. The opening overview is difficult to interpret, while the final paragraph repeats the point that film club and martial arts were almost constant. Linking expressions such as “whereas,” “nevertheless,” and “furthermore” are attempted, but some do not clearly express the relationship between the ideas. Grouping the stable activities together and the changing activities together, with a distinct overview, would make the comparisons easier to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “constant,” “fluctuation,” “surges,” “gradual,” and “downfall,” so the reader can generally identify whether figures rise, fall, or remain stable. However, the range is limited and several choices or combinations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “showed overall constant,” “remain balanced,” and “started its journey.” Spelling errors, including “slighlty,” “visibilly,” and “fluctutuation,” also reduce precision. Some phrases are repeated, particularly descriptions of stability and increase. Aim for accurate, conventional chart language—for example, “remained relatively stable,” “rose sharply,” and “declined steadily”—and check spelling and word forms carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts to combine ideas using clauses and contrast, as in “whereas table tennis surge after 2010,” but control of sentence structure is inconsistent. Several sentences lack clear grammatical relationships or complete, well-formed clauses, and punctuation is often missing, making the meaning harder to follow. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and verb forms: “the graph shows trend,” “table tennis surge,” and “musical performance started” do not consistently match the intended grammatical patterns. Most sentences rely on basic structures, with complex linking attempted but not reliably controlled. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check tense, articles, agreement, and punctuation.
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