Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrate the data regarding numbers of participants in different engagements at social center located in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is evident that the numbers of participants in five different categories were fluctuated throughout the period. The number of members in film club stood at highest point, whereas table tennis participants steadily increased; however the least numbers were for musical performances in 2005 then amateur dramatics became last one.

In 2000, film club went upto 65, far higher then others and styed at peak till 2020. Martial arts members were between 30 and 40, fluctuated over the period and finished at the same point in 2020. The amateur dramatics were only 25 members in start, went down to 15 in 2010, gradually fell more and reached at bottom. A table tennis members were 15 in start then stood at just under 20 after 10 years; Although figure steadily growing towards peak and finshed second highest, 55 members in 2020. A musical performances participants joined in 2005, value rose to 10 in 2010 and grow gradually upwards then finish at 15 members in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all five activities and identify several important patterns, especially the film club’s consistently high participation, table tennis’s strong rise, and the decline in amateur dramatics. Most reported figures are close to the chart. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: amateur dramatics falls to about 20 in 2010, not 15, and musical performances begin in 2010, rather than participants joining in 2005. The overview also says the figures “fluctuated throughout,” which does not capture the contrasting overall trends clearly. To strengthen the response, give a more precise overview of the main changes and check the starting points and key values for each series.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and a final paragraph of details. It also groups several activities together, which helps the reader follow the comparison. However, progression within the detail paragraph is uneven: the account moves from film club to martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances without clearly signalling the main contrasts. Some linking is awkward or mechanical, particularly “whereas” and “however” in the overview, and the semicolon before “Although” disrupts the sentence. Use clearer topic grouping—for example, rising activities together and declining or stable ones together—and make each sentence’s relationship to the previous point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “participants,” “fluctuated,” “steadily increased” and “reached,” so the meaning is generally understandable. There is also some attempt to vary expressions for change. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “different engagements,” “stood at highest point,” “went upto,” and “reached at bottom.” Spelling errors such as “styed” and “finshed” also reduce accuracy. Aim for standard reporting phrases such as “activities,” “remained at a high level,” “rose to,” and “fell to a low of.” More precise vocabulary will make the comparisons sound clearer and more academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “whereas,” “however” and “although.” The overall meaning can usually be followed, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “The graph illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, and “the numbers … were fluctuated” uses an incorrect verb form. Articles and sentence structure are also problematic in “A table tennis members were 15” and “A musical performances participants.” The final sentence’s “then finish” does not maintain consistent tense. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and noun phrases, and check agreement, articles and punctuation when combining clauses; these changes would make your varied sentence attempts more controlled.

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