Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the amount of volunteers for five different curriculum at one social centre in Melbourne,Australia for 20 years .

Overall the film club was quite famous from the very begining which clearly had the most amount of participants among four other clubs .The participants amount was around 65 ,at the end of 2020 it had around 66.

The Table tennis club was stable during 2000 to 2010 but suddenly it got a huge surge from around 18 to approximately 56 in 2020 which had the highest increase among all 5 clubs.

The Musical performances didn't had any increase for the first five years but from 2005 to 2020 it had gotten up to 18 participants from 0.

The Martial arts club was dancing in the data ,it was going slightly upwords and slightly downwords between 5 years of gap first 5 years it was around 36 after that it was around 32 again it gone up to around 37, at the end of 2020 it was around 36.

The Amateur dramatics was the only line in the graph , which got a huge downfall . The five year it was going slightly upwords from around 25 to 27 but after that it started falling apart to around 6 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main patterns: the film club remains the largest, table tennis rises sharply, musical performances grow after starting at zero, and amateur dramatics declines substantially. Most figures and comparisons are consistent with the graph, including the approximate final values. However, the overview is not fully precise: the film club dips slightly before recovering, while martial arts fluctuates rather than moving steadily, and these overall patterns could be summarised more clearly. Some details are also unclear, such as describing table tennis as stable when it rises from about 16 to 20 before levelling off. A more concise overview that groups the strongest rises, falls and stable series would make the key features more complete and clearly developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the activities. This makes the information generally easy to follow, and time markers such as “from 2005 to 2020” help establish sequence. However, the overview and detailed reporting are not clearly separated, and the activity-by-activity paragraphs sometimes read as a list rather than a comparison of related trends. Linking is occasionally awkward, as in “after that it was around 32 again it gone up,” where the sequence is difficult to process. Use clearer sentence boundaries and group the rising series together, then contrast them with the declining or fluctuating ones. This would improve progression and make connections less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “surge,” “stable,” “falling,” and “participants,” so the main information can usually be understood. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or informal for an academic report. “Amount of volunteers” misidentifies the people and uses an unsuitable quantity word; “curriculum” does not describe the activities. Expressions such as “dancing in the data,” “falling apart,” and “most amount” are unclear or unnatural. Spelling errors, including “begining” and “upwords,” also reduce accuracy. Build a more reliable set of trend phrases and use them consistently, for example, “the number of participants,” “fluctuated,” and “declined sharply.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the reader can generally identify the trends being described. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries are noticeable. For example, “The Musical performances didn't had any increase” should use “didn’t have,” while “it had gotten up to 18 participants” is an awkward tense choice for reporting chart data. In “the first five years it was around 36,” the time phrase needs clearer grammatical framing, and several clauses are joined without adequate punctuation. Practise forming accurate past-tense comparisons and separating related points into complete sentences. More consistent control of these patterns would make your descriptions clearer while retaining some variety in sentence structure.

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