Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates number of participants for different activities at social centre in Melbourne Australian city between the year of 2000 and 2020.

Overall, Film club participants is very high in the start of the year wheras, Amateur dramatics is the very low stage as compared to theothers.

In the year of 2000, nearby 20 participants activity is table tennis, by 2020 its increase considerably but after that year its rose steadilt and hit its highest point. In the starting year, almost 35 participants activity is Martial arts,by 2010 its increase slightly wheras at the end its remain same where its starts.

The year of 2000, maximum 35 paerticipants plays Amateur Dramatics but in 2010 it is same with Martial arts, while at the end it hit its lowest point. Musical performance started in 2005 however at the end almost 17 participants participate in it. In early year 60 above participants activity is Film club, by 2010 its decreased consideraby wheras, at the last its reamin stable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant features, including the film club’s high participation, the sharp rise in table tennis, and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview is incomplete and sometimes inaccurate: amateur dramatics did not begin at the lowest level, since musical performances had no participants in 2000, and the film club did not simply remain stable at the end—it rose from about 60 in 2010 to 66 in 2020. Some details are also misreported: amateur dramatics had about 26 participants in 2000, not 35, and musical performances began in 2010, not 2005. To make the summary more complete, give a clear overview of the main contrasting trends and report key figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs of details. It also attempts to organise information by activity and uses time markers such as “In the year of 2000” and “by 2010.” However, there is no consistent progression: the final paragraph moves between amateur dramatics, musical performances, and the film club, while the earlier paragraph combines table tennis and martial arts. Linking words such as “whereas” are repeated and sometimes connect ideas unclearly. For example, “by 2020 its increase considerably but after that year” gives a confusing sequence. Grouping the rising activities together and the declining or fluctuating ones together, with clearer comparisons, would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “participants,” “increase,” “decreased,” and “highest point,” so the reader can generally identify the trends you intend to describe. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “the very low stage,” “its rose steadily,” and “participants activity” are not natural ways to describe the graph. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “wheras,” “paerticipants,” “consideraby,” and “reamin.” Build a more precise set of trend expressions, such as “rose sharply,” “declined steadily,” and “remained relatively stable,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to use both simple and longer sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “whereas,” but control is inconsistent. Frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, and articles sometimes make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “Film club participants is very high” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “by 2020 its increase considerably” needs a correctly formed verb phrase. The sentence beginning “The year of 2000” is also missing a suitable preposition or introductory structure. Punctuation is uneven, with missing spaces after commas and some run-on phrasing. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and straightforward comparison structures before adding more complex clauses.

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