Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the given graph ,it shows the activities involved in 1 social club at Melbourne from 2000 to 2020.

The graph shows that film club is taking huge attention from the start while amateur dramatics losing members by the passing year.

the film club started with the huge number of members in their side and consistent from 2000 to 2020 .Table tennis start gaining members from 2010 and well performed by the year past and make good progress. Martial arts is also consistent in the graph as they don't gain much but neither lost any of their participant.

Amateur dramatics is not widely considered by the peoples as from 2005 they are not considered by the people and in 2020 they almost lost all of their users. musical performances started with zero in 2005 but it take some year for progress and still consistent in 2020 and not a single participant left in musical performances.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast between the film club’s high participation and the decline in amateur dramatics, and you mention all five activities. However, several descriptions are too general or inaccurate: the film club fluctuates slightly rather than remaining fully “consistent,” while table tennis begins rising from 2000, not 2010, and its sharpest growth occurs after 2010. Musical performances begin at zero in 2000 and rise gradually; saying “not a single participant left” is unclear and unsupported. The response also lacks a clear, concise overview of the most important changes and gives few precise comparisons or figures. To strengthen the report, summarise the overall leaders, biggest rise and steepest decline, then support these with accurate data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some organisation: it introduces the graph and then discusses the activities, with the film club, table tennis and martial arts grouped before the declining and emerging activities. However, the ideas do not develop in a clear overall progression, and there are no distinct overview and detail paragraphs. Several sentences run together, such as “Table tennis start gaining members…” followed immediately by the martial-arts point, making comparisons harder to follow. Linking is also repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “and,” while references such as “they” and “their” are sometimes unclear because activities are treated as people. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect comparisons explicitly with phrases such as “by contrast” or “whereas.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “participants,” “consistent,” “progress” and “started,” so the reader can generally identify the activities and trends. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing a graph. Phrases such as “taking huge attention,” “well performed,” “members in their side” and “not widely considered by the peoples” do not clearly express participation trends. “Users” is also an unsuitable substitute for participants in this context. Aim for accurate trend language and natural collocations, for example, “attracted the most participants,” “rose sharply,” “remained relatively stable” and “fell to six.” Avoid repeating “considered” when you mean that participation declined.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the report less clear. Examples include “In the given graph, it shows,” which has an unnecessary subject, and “Table tennis start gaining,” where the verb form does not agree with the subject and tense. In “Amateur dramatics is not widely considered … as from 2005 they are not considered,” the sentence structure and pronoun reference are difficult to follow. Articles, plurals and punctuation also need attention: “1 social club,” “the peoples,” and missing spaces after full stops are examples. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build longer sentences around clear comparisons, checking agreement and punctuation before finishing.

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