Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It has been the on going debate in a society, while one part of the society believes the competition at work, at school and in daily is a best thing to find talented individuals, critics argue that we should be more cooperative and work together rather than competing with each other. From my perspective, I partially agree with both ideas, although the competition builds consistency, courage and discipline, there are some drawbacks like it creates jealousy and hatred.

To start with, the members of society who supports the competition argue that, it helps organisations to find out talented people, whose fit perfectly for their roles. Additionally it also builds consistency and confidence in students to get higher marks than others, which might be helpful in their later lives. Furthermore, the competition in daily lives has positive impacts for overall society. For instance if a shop owner is selling a product and his competitor is also selling the same product. They both will try to improve the quality of their product for attracting the more customers.

On other side, the people who emphasise the cooperation instead of competing claims that the friendly environment will create a more opportunities for people to learn and discover new things. For instance discussing the problems at work place may provide us better solutions to know the root causes of issue. Moreover all of students enrolled in schools aren’t have a same understanding level to get higher marks so it will create hatred among students. Many people in daily lives will feel jealous from their friends if they feel they are more competent than them .

In the conclusion, the combination of competition and cooperation can provide better results. School and work places should provide tasks in groups so students and employees can discuss with each other while giving extra rewards for best performances.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You discuss both competition and cooperation and give a clear, balanced position: you “partially agree with both ideas” and conclude that combining them can produce better results. Relevant examples support the main points, particularly the shop owners improving product quality and colleagues discussing workplace problems. This meets the task well, though some ideas are more fully explained than others. For example, the benefits of competition for organisations and students are stated, but the link between competition and “consistency” or later success is not developed. The claim that cooperation creates “more opportunities” is also broad. To strengthen the response, explain the consequences of each example and clarify how your proposed balance would work in practice.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion that returns to your position. Signposting such as “To start with,” “On other side,” and “In the conclusion” helps readers follow the discussion, and examples are generally placed alongside the relevant claims. However, some connections are mechanical, and the progression within paragraphs could be clearer. In the cooperation paragraph, the discussion moves from workplace problem-solving to differences in students’ ability and then to jealousy without explaining how these points connect. Use clearer links between claims and examples, and develop one central idea at a time. Your conclusion could also connect its practical recommendation more explicitly to the arguments in the body.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “talented individuals,” “cooperative,” “root causes,” and “competent.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and some topic-specific language helps distinguish the two positions. There are, however, several inaccurate or unnatural word choices and collocations, such as “builds consistency,” “a more opportunities,” and “feel jealous from their friends.” “Competition” and “cooperation” are also repeated frequently, with limited variation. These issues do not prevent understanding, but they reduce precision and naturalness. Aim to learn common word partnerships and choose alternatives where appropriate—for example, competition can “motivate people to improve,” while cooperation can “foster a supportive environment.” Check spelling and word forms as part of editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex forms, including a concession in “although the competition builds consistency… there are some drawbacks” and a conditional example beginning “if a shop owner is selling a product.” The overall meaning is usually clear, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the members of society who supports” has subject–verb disagreement, and “all of students enrolled in schools aren’t have” combines incompatible verb forms. The opening sentence also joins several clauses in a way that makes its structure difficult to follow. Review agreement, articles, and verb forms, and use full stops to separate long ideas. More accurate control of these patterns, alongside your attempts at complex sentences, would make the argument easier to read.

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