Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that competion at work, at schools and in daily life is good think,while other think that everyone should cooperate with workers as well as students.In my perspective,we can learn many thing from competition.

First of all, it is very common that if you work or study anywere.people try to competition with you.Therfore,we can learn many thing by doing competition by someone.But it does'nt mean that you harm someone.We should do competition in responsible way.It has lots of benifits if you have a competitor.when you know that you will do your work as well as your study by concentrate because it encourage you to win the competition.It encourage you to do hard work.However, if someone need help so we should help him and cooperate with him.

secondly,if we see any company,behind the success,the reason will be once.It is called hard work and competition.I believe that behind the development of any person is competition. It helps us to concentrate better and we can achieve any thing in our live.Morever, some people make competition more serious and they try to harm someone or jealous someone.Therefore, we can develop our society by competition.For example, a student have a competitor in his school.So,he will make more efforts to achieve goals.

In concluion,competition play a vital role in everyone life,its encourage us to achieve our goals.Therefore, we can do our work more better and achieve our goals in few time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a clear preference for competition, stating, “In my perspective, we can learn many thing from competition,” and you offer relevant reasons, such as motivation to work hard and a student making greater efforts to reach goals. However, the task asks you to discuss both competition and cooperation, and cooperation receives only brief mention: you say people should help one another, but do not explain its benefits or develop that viewpoint. Your position is therefore only partly supported, and several claims about competition are repeated rather than explored with specific examples. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum. To strengthen the answer, explain why cooperation matters, compare the two approaches, and develop each main point with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

Your response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “First of all,” “secondly,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of your argument. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and the second body paragraph moves from company success to personal development and then to a student example without clearly connecting these points. Some linking words are repeated or used mechanically, particularly “Therefore” and “It encourage[s].” The cooperation point is inserted briefly rather than integrated into the discussion. Organise each paragraph around one central idea, use clearer references between sentences, and make the relationship between examples and claims explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “competitor,” “cooperate,” “concentrate,” “development,” and “achieve our goals,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive, especially “competition,” “work,” and “achieve,” and some word choices or combinations are inaccurate, such as “do competition,” “in responsible way,” and “make more efforts.” Spelling errors—including “competion,” “Therfore,” “benifits,” and “concluion”—are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the writing. Build a wider set of natural collocations for discussing rivalry and teamwork, and proofread spelling and word forms. More precise vocabulary would also help distinguish healthy competition from harmful behaviour.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including a conditional idea in “if someone need help so we should help him,” and you use clauses beginning with “when” and “because.” However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include subject–verb agreement (“competition play,” “it encourage,” “someone need”), missing or incorrect articles (“in responsible way”), and faulty sentence construction (“if you work or study anywere.people try to competition with you”). Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and a lowercase “secondly.” Practise accurate sentence patterns first, especially agreement and complete clauses, then add more varied complex sentences and check punctuation.

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