Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Several individuals argue that copetition at workplace, at school and in daily life is a good thing. while other believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. From my perspective, competition is the best thing.

on the one hand, the competition at any place is the best thing because competition can enhence the abiliy of the individuals. they mostly try to beat their opponents and try to stay first in the place. they also do more hardwork to beat their opponents and try to keep their place first. For instance, the student who have a lot of his friend and he tried to beat their friends and classmates . he have to work hard and do much of their time to studies to beaten them. Moreover , Competition can make the individuals to stay stong and try to gave a huge difference among their opponents.

On the other hand, cooperating with the friends is the goog thing because everyone have to meet with them and try to extrovert with friend and study together. For instance, If they stuck in every difficulties they have to share a problem with their friends and all friend uses their mind to solve this problem together.

In colclusion, From my perspective students have to tackle all the problems together and try to stay together. Everyone have their own minds , if the one student have face the problem all of their friends help him and solve this problem. if the student have to compite their opponents .He has to work hard and try to beat their opponents.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear opinion—“competition is the best thing”—and include points about both competition and cooperation, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is brief and the ideas are only minimally developed: the example about a student studying to beat classmates supports competition, while the cooperation paragraph gives a general example of friends solving a problem together. Your conclusion then shifts towards students tackling problems together, leaving your final position less consistent than the opening. The response also contains 244 words, six below the required minimum; the 24 words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop both views with fuller explanation and make your opinion consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs beginning “on the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. These signposts help readers identify the two sides of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several points repeat, particularly the idea of beating opponents and staying first. Connections between ideas are sometimes unclear, while the conclusion introduces cooperation as the preferred approach despite the opening favouring competition. Improve the logical flow by giving each paragraph one main point, explaining it, and linking it clearly to an example. Use referencing and transitions to show how the conclusion follows from the discussion rather than simply repeating earlier points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “opponents,” and “solve this problem together,” so the main ideas can generally be understood. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “beat their opponents” and “try to.” There are also spelling and word-choice errors, such as “copetition,” “enhence,” “abiliy,” “goog,” and “compite,” which reduce accuracy and sometimes make the wording harder to follow. Build a wider set of topic-specific expressions and check spelling carefully. More natural collocations, such as “improve their abilities” and “work collaboratively,” would help express the ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences, including the example about students working hard to outperform classmates, and use basic linking structures such as “because” and “if.” However, sentence patterns are limited, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently. For example, “the student who have” should use a singular verb, and “everyone have” also needs subject–verb agreement. The conditional sentence beginning “If they stuck” lacks an appropriate verb form, while several sentences begin with lowercase letters after full stops. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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