Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Now a days, competition is a source of completion our different tasks so that it encourages people to more compensate on our works. In this regard there are two schools of thoughts one of them believes compete with others is a good thing while, others support that we should cooperate with others do not compete against each other. I think we should cooperate with others and helps with each other.
On the one hand, to begins with the first group pf people justifies competition at school, at work and in daily life is a best thing because in this way people get more achievement and success in our lives and it is profitable. For example, it has been proven in the latest research that conducted in USA 95% people compete with others to achieve our goals,
On the other hand, other group of people advocate we should cooperate with each other we cannot make hurdle for others it means, in this way we should get more satisfaction when we help with others, and it is very valuable for people so that is a better way to get our goals while cooperate with others. For instance, it has been proven in the latest research that conducted in Uk 99% people are working together and help out in serious situations.
According to my opinion, I believe working together is best way to keep it up and ignore all the jealousy and do not compete with anyone in other words, it is a best thing to stand with each other and help with in every aspect of life.
In conclusions, it can be summarized that one group prefer competition against others is a better thing but some feel that we compensate with each other and help out. And I think we should cooperate with each other not compare with others.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You address both sides of the question and state a consistent preference for cooperation, particularly in “I think we should cooperate with others.” The response also includes examples intended to support each view. However, the discussion remains limited: the competition paragraph mainly says it brings “achievement and success,” without explaining how competition produces these outcomes or acknowledging possible drawbacks. The cooperation argument is similarly general, and the claimed research figures are not explained or connected to a specific situation. Your position is clear, but it would be stronger if you developed the reasons behind it and used more concrete, relevant examples. This would make the response address the task more fully rather than relying on broad claims.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the change in viewpoint. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear because several ideas are joined in long, loosely connected sentences. For example, the cooperation paragraph moves from not creating a “hurdle” to satisfaction and achieving goals without clearly showing how these points relate. The conclusion also repeats the main position rather than drawing the discussion together. Use clearer topic sentences, divide explanations into manageable steps, and make references between ideas more precise to improve the flow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “achievement,” and “satisfaction,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. “Compensate” is repeatedly used where the intended meaning appears to be “cooperate,” while “completion our different tasks” does not express the idea clearly. Phrases such as “a best thing” and “help with each other” also sound unnatural. These choices sometimes make the reader work to interpret your meaning. Build a more precise set of topic-related expressions and check that each word fits its context and grammatical form.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, the range of structures is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “we should cooperate with others and helps with each other” has inconsistent verb forms, while “when we help with others” does not form the intended grammatical pattern. There are also recurring problems with articles and sentence construction, as in “it is a best thing,” and punctuation sometimes joins separate ideas into confusing sentences. Practise building accurate sentences with subordinate clauses, and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and clause boundaries. More reliable control of these basics would make your ideas easier to understand.
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