Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Everyone is different from each others and everyine had different perspective. Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Generally, Competition is good thing if positive. As it encourages the other person's thinking ability, develop patience and teaches new ideas and giving new ideas sometimes. At work colleague can learn many things from each other if there's no professional jealousy. Same goes to school. it teaches patience and better understanding of the situation, may develop coping skills.

However, It has some negative impact too. If two students are participating in a competition and other win the competition, it can create a negative effect on a person's mental health, he/she will perceive the winner as her enemy. There will be jealousy factor too which can leads to alot of problems.

In my opinion, There should be a competition, but before the competition begin, there should be counselor.or psychologist too who help the participants with their counseling skills that its a competition and if any of you loose the game you woll learn the new things. Specially, in early childhood schools should implement it for the future of the children.

In conclusion, Everything has positive and negative percpect. Anything which has extra part of negativity or positivity is harmful. There should ne a balance in everything. And school.amd working environment should definitely conduct the competitions among the participants for creating positive energy and environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and give a personal position: competition can be beneficial, but it should be balanced and supported by counselling. The discussion is relevant, with examples involving colleagues and students, but the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, you mention that competition can build patience and coping skills without explaining how these outcomes arise, while the negative effects are mainly described as jealousy and harm to mental health. Your opinion is present, though the proposal for a counsellor is not fully explained or connected to workplace and everyday competition. The response is also 26 words below the 250-word minimum; the 32 words copied from the task prompt are not counted. Develop each view with clearer reasoning and a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs on benefits and drawbacks, your opinion, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the main direction, and transitions such as “However” and “In conclusion” signal changes in focus. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several ideas are placed together without showing their relationship. The final paragraph repeats the need for balance and competitions rather than drawing together the discussion. Some linking is also awkward, as in “Same goes to school,” and the opening repeats much of the task wording. Use topic sentences to establish each paragraph’s main point, then connect explanations and examples explicitly; make the conclusion summarise your position without introducing another broad claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “professional jealousy,” “mental health,” “coping skills,” and “positive energy.” These terms help communicate the main ideas, but the overall range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning less clear. Examples include “different from each others,” “negative impact,” “alot of problems,” and “extra part of negativity or positivity.” Spelling errors such as “everyine,” “percpect,” and “woll” are also noticeable. Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, describe competition as having “potential benefits and drawbacks,” and explain that losing may “undermine a participant’s confidence” rather than relying on general phrases about negative effects.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a conditional idea in “If two students are participating in a competition…” and a relative clause in “who help the participants.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “Everyone is different from each others,” “it can leads,” and “There should ne a balance,” which show problems with agreement and verb forms. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “counselor.or psychologist” and the lower-case “it” after a full stop. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentence construction. Proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb, and use commas and full stops consistently.

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