Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Firstly, I want to say about compettion is a way to judge and improve yourself. You find the mistakes and practice more. In the first statement mention a thing a lot of people belive that, competiton is benificial which always impact on everywhere. I also agree with this. It is very signficant for find your weak points.

In the second statement, other group of people think assist is much better than competiton. Because these people afraid by the judgement. They are not confident about the result. I think this is the not point to what is the result? You should participate the competiton.

In my point of view, I strongly belive that any competiton is a great option to improve your ability. For example when i was in school every week our class teacher arranged a competiton about historical knowledgde. After this sir give the top highest scoreer and also prize. We are trying to our best for take the top postion. Now i realise It was very impactful for us.

In conclusion two group of people are right in their point. But competiton always play a better role in office, educational instituions, sports.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear preference for competition, explaining that it can help people identify weaknesses and improve, and your school history-quiz example is relevant. However, the task asks you to discuss both competition and cooperation, and the second view receives only brief, unclear treatment: you suggest that people favour cooperation because they fear judgement, without explaining the benefits cooperation can bring. Your conclusion says both groups are right, which also weakens the strength of your earlier position. The response is 194 words, below the required 250, so the discussion and supporting ideas remain notably underdeveloped. To improve, explain a genuine advantage of cooperation, develop each view with reasons or examples, and make your final position consistent.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: separate paragraphs introduce competition, the opposing view, your opinion and a conclusion. Sequencing is generally understandable, and phrases such as “In the second statement” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and some links are unclear or mechanical. For example, “Because these people afraid by the judgement” is not clearly connected to the preceding claim, while “I think this is the not point to what is the result?” interrupts the argument rather than developing it. The conclusion introduces the idea that both groups are right without reconciling it with your strong support for competition. Build clearer links between claims and explanations, and use paragraphing to develop each side more fully.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small range of relevant vocabulary, including “improve,” “weak points,” “confident,” and “impactful,” so the main topic is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear or natural. Examples include “compettion,” “belive,” “benificial,” and “signficant”; these errors recur in key terms. Some combinations are also awkward, such as “top highest scoreer,” “take the top postion,” and “play a better role.” Aim to use accurate topic vocabulary and natural collocations, such as “identify areas for improvement,” “work collaboratively,” and “achieve the highest score.” Proofreading repeated words carefully would also make your meaning easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate your main position using mostly short, simple sentences, and the paragraph structure gives the reader some support. However, the range of sentence forms is limited, and attempts to connect or expand ideas often contain grammatical errors. For example, “Because these people afraid by the judgement” lacks a finite verb, while “It is very signficant for find your weak points” has an incorrect infinitive pattern. In “After this sir give the top highest scoreer and also prize,” the verb form and sentence construction are faulty. There are also problems with articles, agreement and punctuation, as in “competiton always play.” Practise building accurate sentences with because/although clauses and check verb forms, articles and subject–verb agreement.

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