Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In recent years in every sectors was became competitive whatever it is work, school or daily life. other beleive that we should try to cooperate mere rather than competing against each other. I will discuss both of these views and I will give my own opinion.

On the one hand, there are competitive in every place specially at work. In our country highly

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 2.5

The opening identifies the topic and signals an intention to discuss both views and give an opinion, but the response does not actually develop either side. The only supporting point begins, “there are competitive in every place specially at work,” and then stops at “In our country highly,” so no reason, example, or explanation is provided. Your own opinion is announced but never stated. As a result, the task is addressed only minimally, and the reader cannot understand the arguments you intended to make. To improve, complete the discussion of competition and cooperation, state your position clearly, and support each main idea with a relevant explanation or example. The response also falls substantially short of the required minimum length, leaving the task incomplete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introductory paragraph is followed by a paragraph beginning “On the one hand,” which signals the start of a discussion. The introduction also previews the intended structure. However, the response ends before the first argument is completed, so there is no progression through both views or a concluding position. The transition “On the one hand” is not followed by a contrasting section such as “On the other hand,” and the relationship between the ideas remains unclear. Develop separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, using clear links between claims, explanations, and examples. A conclusion would help bring the discussion together.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response includes some vocabulary relevant to the topic, such as “competitive,” “cooperate,” and “competing against each other,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the range is very limited in this short response, and several word choices or forms are inaccurate: “every sectors,” “other beleive,” and “cooperate mere” make parts of the introduction less clear. “There are competitive” also shows difficulty selecting the appropriate form of the key word. Aim to use accurate topic vocabulary and collocations, for example, “competition in the workplace” and “cooperation among colleagues.” Proofread spelling and word forms, and extend your vocabulary to explain benefits and drawbacks rather than repeating the central terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a complex opening sentence and use a clear introductory statement, but control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent. In “In recent years in every sectors was became competitive,” the time phrase, plural noun, and verb construction do not form a grammatical sentence. “I will discuss both of these views and I will give my own opinion” is understandable, though the repeated clause structure is basic. The fragment “In our country highly” is incomplete and prevents the intended point from being understood. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and tense patterns. Once your ideas are developed, vary sentence structures while ensuring each sentence is complete and accurately punctuated.

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