Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individuals think that challegeable tasks are necessary in work, at school and in everyday life is a devastating thing.In contrast,others think that we should work together and talk about each topic then it will increase your knowlege rather than competing against each other and try to push out fellows.

when people study together,they can not fully concentrate on studies.They talk about different things rather then studying.but its not necassary for all groups.some groups studied together and learn alot of new things. Discuss every topic about each other and makes notes that will usefull for our future exam.when compettion in all these childrens then they will won othherwise not.when they dont think about how to compete each other they will never progress in future.

Furthermore,defintely we should try to cooperate, help out each other whenever someone needs help.If you understand the topic but youer friends not understood so definately its up to you to learn this friend.Competition has its own place but still cooperation is essential.when you teach something it will also increased your own knowledge.For instant,in our daily life is not crucial to competition with your neighbours relatives because when you dont have alot of facilitis , luxcrious resources are not available but your neighbours have so dont try compete each other beacause its up to Allah to give somepeople massive facilities some are not.

In my opinion,Its very essential to having competition with each other its very convenient for your future goals.You will achieve anything in your life when you worked really hard and try to compete each others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to discuss both cooperation and competition and gives a personal view, particularly in the final paragraph, where you say competition is important for achieving future goals. You also offer relevant points about studying together and helping friends understand a topic. However, the discussion is only partial: the benefits of competition are asserted rather than explained, and the cooperation argument shifts to neighbours’ unequal access to facilities without clearly connecting this example to cooperation. Your position is also difficult to follow because the opening describes competition as “a devastating thing,” while the conclusion supports it. Make your view consistent from the introduction onward, and develop each side with a clear reason and a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some paragraphing, and basic signposts such as “In contrast,” “Furthermore,” and “In my opinion” show an attempt to guide the reader. The response also moves broadly from studying together to cooperation and then to your opinion. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the discussion of group study moves abruptly from distraction to note-taking and then to competition. Connections between ideas are sometimes missing, and references such as “this friend” and “all these childrens” are not clear. Several sentences run together without appropriate spacing or punctuation, making the argument harder to follow. Organise each paragraph around one main point, then explain it and link it explicitly to the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “cooperate,” “competing,” “concentrate,” “future goals,” and “knowledge,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “challegeable tasks,” “push out fellows,” and “when compettion in all these childrens.” Spelling errors, including “knowlege,” “necassary,” and “defintely,” are noticeable and sometimes slow the reader. Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “massive facilities” for material advantages. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing workplace and academic competition, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentences and conditional structures, for example, “If you understand the topic but youer friends not understood,” and “when you dont have alot of facilitis…”. These attempts show an effort to express relationships between ideas, but the structures are often faulty, and many sentences contain errors that make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “Some individuals think that… is a devastating thing,” “they will won,” and “it will also increased your own knowledge.” Subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries need more reliable control. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using correctly formed clauses and consistent punctuation.

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