Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In today competative world, there is a debate about wether competition and cooperation is more benficial in school, work and daily life. Some people believe that competings with others motivates people . On the other hand, people argue that cooperation is more better to supportive enviornment , While, I belived that cooperation is more benificial and better to work in any area of life.

On the first hand, the people who work togather and shere different tasks to their relevent persons it become easy to complete and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies both sides of the debate and gives a clear preference for cooperation, stating that it is “more beneficial and better to work in any area of life.” However, the discussion is only begun: the point about sharing tasks is unfinished, and there is no developed explanation or relevant example showing why competition may be beneficial. The view in favour of cooperation is also asserted rather than supported. As a result, the task is addressed only partially, with ideas remaining very limited and under-developed. The response also does not meet the required minimum of 250 words. To improve, complete the discussion of both views, explain your reasons, add a relevant example, and develop your opinion in a conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an identifiable opening that introduces the topic, signals the two positions with “On the other hand,” and states the writer’s preference. This gives the reader a basic sense of direction. However, the response stops during the first supporting paragraph, so there is no complete progression from discussion to conclusion and no developed paragraph structure. Some linking is also awkward: “On the first hand” is not the appropriate counterpart to “On the other hand,” and “While” is used in a way that does not clearly connect the ideas. Build separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, use linking phrases accurately, and ensure each paragraph develops one complete point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “competition,” “cooperation,” “motivates,” “supportive environment,” and “complete.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is narrow, and several spelling errors—such as “competative,” “wether,” “benficial,” “enviornment,” and “togather”—reduce accuracy. Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, including “competings with others,” “more better,” and “to their relevent persons.” Aim to use accurate forms and natural collocations, such as “competing with others,” “more beneficial,” and “assign tasks to the appropriate people.” A wider range of precise terms for advantages, teamwork, and outcomes would help develop the discussion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writer attempts both simple statements and a longer sentence beginning “Some people believe,” showing an effort to connect ideas. However, control is inconsistent, and the unfinished sentence “it become easy to complete and” prevents the meaning from being completed. There are also problems with sentence construction and punctuation, for example the comma splice and capitalisation in “environment , While,” and the structure “the people who work together … it become easy” does not form a clear, accurate sentence. The opening also shifts awkwardly between clauses. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, checking agreement and verb forms, and using punctuation to separate clauses. Short, accurate sentences are a useful foundation before adding complex structures.

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