Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many people believe that it is good to have competition at work, at school and in daily life and others argue that cooperation is more important than competiting against each other. This essay agrees that we should try to cooperate more because it will lead to create positive environment and reduce feeling of jealousy among people.

People often compare themselves with others and try to do better in every stages of life. This is particularly relevant when a group of individuals work together, they may have the tendency to accomplish more than others. While it may improve the condition of a person due to work hard, sometimes it can be stressful specially when anyone achieve less than others. For instance, students with bad results may feel stressed if they compete with others who makes good results. This type of feeling comes from unhealthy compitition among students.

Cooperation can be a good source of creating a good bonding with each other and growing together. If children are tought to cooperate with others at school, they will help each other to do better. As a result, there will be a positive environment to learn together reducing jealousy among students. For example, one my classmates was not good at making notes in the class. She used take my class notes everyday which hampered my studies. One day I showed her how to do class notes in short time. After that she stopped requesting me for my notes because she was able to make her own notes. Therefore, It solved my problem and her issue as well and both of us got a good marks in exam.

In conclusion, although compitition is good for improving individuals present condition, unhealthy compititon may causes frustration. People may achieve good outcome by cooperating with each other and reducing envy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the discussion and state a clear preference for cooperation, explaining that it can create a positive environment and reduce jealousy. The examples about students comparing results and your classmate learning to make notes are relevant, and the personal example helps illustrate mutual benefit. However, the case for competition is less fully developed: you mention that it can motivate people to work harder, but do not explain when or why this is beneficial. Some points also remain general, such as the claim that cooperation helps people “grow together.” Develop each side more evenly and make the reasoning behind your opinion more explicit. The response meets the task’s length requirement; nine words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph on competition, one on cooperation, and a conclusion. The progression from the possible benefits of competition to its stress-related drawbacks is understandable, and the personal example gives the cooperation paragraph a logical sequence. Linking phrases such as “For instance,” “As a result,” and “In conclusion” help guide the reader. To make the organisation more effective, ensure that each paragraph develops one central point fully and use references more precisely. For example, “This type of feeling” refers broadly to the stress and comparison described just before it, while “Therefore, It solved my problem” could identify the problem directly. Some transitions are also formulaic; clearer links between claims and explanations would strengthen the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to discuss the topic and convey your main ideas, including “cooperation,” “competition,” “positive environment,” “jealousy,” and “frustration.” There are also attempts to express more specific ideas, such as “accomplish more” and “unhealthy competition.” However, several word-choice and collocation problems make the writing less natural, including “lead to create,” “good bonding,” “got a good marks,” and “improving individuals present condition.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “compitition,” “competiting,” and “tought” are noticeable. Build a more accurate range of topic vocabulary and check spelling and common word partnerships; this will make your meaning more precise without changing the ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional sentence beginning “If children are…” and a contrast introduced by “While.” Most of the main ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “in every stages” needs singular agreement, “when anyone achieve” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “She used take” is missing “to.” There are also problems with articles and plurals in “got a good marks,” and the sentence beginning “While it may improve…” is awkwardly constructed. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “Therefore, It.” Review agreement, verb patterns, articles, and sentence boundaries, then proofread complex sentences to ensure their clauses are complete and clearly connected.

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