Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Competition play important role in every field, even at school time and work time at home or at any business. Few people think competition is most important at every stage of life. On the other side, few people believes to concentrate their own work. They think complete their work on time rather than competing against to other. In my points of view, competition play better role in our life.

The number of people believe that we should try to complete their work on time rather than competing against each other. They believe that we should always try to complete their work on time. we should improve our work with the passage of time. we should not need to compate work to other. For example, we do study at school we try to complete their work and improve their work instead

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a relevant opinion—“competition play better role in our life”—and begin to explain the view that people should focus on completing and improving their own work. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it does not develop the benefits of competition, and the cooperation view is repeated rather than explained in depth. The school example is unfinished (“we try to complete their work and improve their work instead”), so it does not show how cooperation works or support a clear comparison. The response also contains 140 words, below the required 250. To strengthen your answer, discuss both views in separate, developed sections, give a complete example for each, and explain why you ultimately favour competition or cooperation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces the topic and your opinion, while the next paragraph focuses on the view that people should complete their own work. Phrases such as “On the other side” and “For example” also signal relationships between ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the first paragraph presents several positions without clearly distinguishing them, and the second repeats the same point about finishing work on time. The final example stops abruptly, leaving the paragraph incomplete. Use a clear structure—introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion—and make each paragraph develop one main idea with accurate linking and clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to identify the general topic, using words such as “competition,” “cooperate,” “improve,” and “complete their work.” Some phrases also show an attempt to express comparison, including “rather than competing against each other.” However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “work” and “complete” appearing several times, and some word choices or forms are inaccurate: “Few people” does not clearly express the intended general groups, “compate” is misspelled, and “In my points of view” is not a natural expression. These choices sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Build a wider set of topic vocabulary, such as “collaboration,” “shared goals,” and “healthy rivalry,” and check spelling and common word partnerships.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You mainly use simple statements and make an attempt at a longer example, so the response shows some ability to form basic sentences. However, the range of structures is very limited, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “Competition play important role” has problems with subject–verb agreement and article use, while “Few people believes” has an agreement error. The sentence “They think complete their work on time” is missing a grammatical subject or infinitive structure, and the final example is incomplete. Capitalisation is also inconsistent after full stops, as in “we should improve.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex forms using “because,” “while,” and “although.”

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